Black Poetry : The Blues

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  1. rymjack5

    rymjack5 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The melody in the scratch and rasp
    inspiration in the anguished soul
    who offers resilience--in those old songs
    life comes to bloom in monotony
    as the toil bears its fruit
    in a libidinous undulating rhythm.

    Hail rained a menace that morning
    amidst the thunder's boom and bellows.
    As I stood before the window
    my tears wormed out--lightning
    slashed my world to chaos
    she listened to nothing
    she told me to leave--indifferent
    to the whirlwinds and tsunamis
    battering my innards--drowning
    my mind--I convulsed with hysterics
    laughing at the lack of a riddle.
    Savage rains--anger, self-doubt
    and an agonized smile.


    No more bleating on my window
    let this storm in my soul die down.
    Bleeding--I lay entranced
    dreaming the nightmares come real.
    Laughter announces the misery
    imagined by the monomaniac
    anxious--deluded--exhausted.

    Sun breaking cloud, love's awakened
    her beacon--hope
    the song grinds on
    I skip to its chop
    smiling at the game
    as love moves on...
    burn the page
     
  2. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your words just gripped me. There's something about this flow that I can't even put into words. Beautiful is not the word for it...but i'll use it.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW!

    I agree with true love that your piece is riveting. And just beautifully put together. What a flow.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
    u master a flow untouched
     
  5. rymjack5

    rymjack5 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you true love, gempis and $$RICH$$ for the positive feedback and encouraging words. You all have brightened my day.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ya flow gave light as well thank u for sharing
     
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    Wow........you captured me completely....had me clinging to
    each word, every emotion - the pain, the "Blues" and then
    the sunshine of her love returned...........(page burned...I liked that)

    wow.........your writing is phenomenal!

    Encore, Encore, Encore!
     
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