Black Poetry : The Before & After Deffect

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm still here, still breathing,
    I'm here, heart still beating,
    While you're seemingly drifting,
    I'm still here, still breathing,
    I'm here, heart still beating,
    While you're seemingly fading,
    I'm still here,

    Left alone inside the new,
    World's are colliding,
    Fronteers are subsiding,
    And I'm drowning inside,
    Everything I thought was true,
    Everything I tought I knew,
    Is floating away from me,
    Is slipping away from me now,

    I'm watching the black sun rise,
    Once sung by the wise,
    We're nothing inside your eyes,
    Our existence is nothing but lies...

    Staring at the mirror,
    I'm crying for the past,
    Memories that didn't last,
    The reflection begins to bend,
    My image begins to fade,
    Tears in my eyes cascade,
    As my body dissipates...

    I'm watching the black sun rise,
    Once sung by the wise,
    We're nothing inside your eyes,
    Our existence is nothing but lies,
    The Angel of Death's in our minds,
    My dreams were once so bright,
    But then you pushed them out of sight,
    Now every days a ******* fight,
    And I'm even afraid to sleep at night 'cause,
    The Angel of Death's in our minds!

    You left me here crawling,
    You left me here falling,
    You left me here inside this,
    Inside this cause & effect,
    The before & after deffect...

    I'm still here, still breathing,
    I'm here, heart still beating,
    While you're seemingly drifting,
    I'm still here, still breathing,
    I'm here, heart still beating,
    While you're seemingly fading,
    I'm still here...watching the black sun rise...
    I'm watching the black sun rise,
    Once sung by the wise,
    We're nothing inside your eyes,
    Our existence is nothing but lies...
    My dreams were once so bright,
    But then you pushed them out of sight,
    Now every days a ******* fight,
    And I'm even afraid to sleep at night 'cause,
    The Angel of Death's in our minds!
    :deal:



    *~Be Careful Wut u chose to do in life becuz sum1 maybe followin ur footsteps~*
     
  2. CarrieMonet

    CarrieMonet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That moved me! Feeling your pain...that is a really good poem!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The way you expressed this, the feeling of having everything you know of as truth, seem liked they were never true, but lies. I felt a feeling of devastation in this. Deeply felt.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    felt dis deeply u really expressed this with open heart & pain i feel u
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :read: :eeek: :read: :eeek:
    Sista can you say *chills* i was reading this and I grew more and more silent in my read...simple breathing in the reality of your words.
    be careful for real *whew*
     
  6. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwwes thanx my fellow poets. U guys are like my new found family. I can come here with a frown and leave with a cheesy kool-aid smile. Im lovin all this love. :spinn:
     
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    such an air of mystery
    in your words but the
    rhythm is undenied...
    you really set the tone
    in this piece...very effective

    feeling this!
     
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