Black Poetry : ~The Battle For My Heart~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she holds a beauty so
    powerful
    sometimes i refuse to look
    at her face...
    i can't fall in love
    but
    i
    am
    getting weaker, and her love is
    starting to make its
    way...
    to my heart
    her love on a dreadful journey
    to take charge...
    through the raging land of
    storms...
    a land of shattered dreams
    where love doesn't
    belong...
    how long
    can i hold
    against her powerful
    love?
    "be a man, go for it"
    urging words
    from my brother
    lpoet...
    but i'm too
    scared of it
    for when she kisses me...
    i succomb
    to her
    instantly...
    i'm trying to wake up
    but the more she grows
    in me....
    the more i realize
    she is not a
    dream...
    but her name
    isn't
    destiny...
    Destiny!
    Destiny!
    Destiny!
    i could taste it
    and it's so sweet...
    like when she screams
    she wants me...
    when we make love
    so passionately...
    but how can i make love
    to her
    when i don't believe it?
    i don't trust it!
    but it's not like,
    we just ****ing!
    it's more than that
    it's not lust!
    she is in love
    and i am not
    i see the pain
    in her
    eyes...
    but only if she could
    understand...
    my aching
    a tortured
    land..
    i'm scared
    so
    scared
    of love
    but she refuses
    to leave me
    for she is determined
    to win the
    battle for my heart...


    __________________
     
  2. Kimdricka

    Kimdricka Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You did a really good job in how you put this together. i like how you told the truth about how U felt about love. i once read where someone wrote "Love is never wrong and seldomly right. It just is." So since it's never wrong, don't be afraid of it. go on and try it. Let love in. ;)

    Kim
     
  3. Ladysoul

    Ladysoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was too good! you had me from the very beginning.
     
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    UL820 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "helluva write"
     
  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Excellent

    Reflection of a loving heart, this is beautiful
     
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    very nice
    "...if love choses you .....
     
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    Sista Steele Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...the beauty of love...
     
  9. Jyntlbreez

    Jyntlbreez Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mind~soul..I loved the way you've masterfully displayed the internal war/struggle with this thing called love...
    Great read!
     
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