Black Poetry : the bath

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Dec 8, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Been awhile since I walked in
    and saw you
    there!
    the liquid pool shimmering
    across your face..your back..your knees
    IT STOPPED ME

    I couldn't/didn't want to move

    the steam of the room/me dripping
    Lavender,rosewater scents
    cascading my body
    whisking whirling through my thighs

    your body moved
    there!
    rippling waters flowing on the
    clawed round tub
    I MOVED

    I couldn't/didn't want to be still

    purring closer..purring
    till your warm hands
    trickled ,oozed wetness
    tenderly up...
    up...up...til
    only the sea envelops me
    I SCREAMED IN E

    I could/I did want...want...want...
    You

    A waterfall of
    smiling eyes...open mouth
    inviting,knowing
    hey!

    I GOT IN
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    warm water touch here
    this was divine ummm!!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Seems that it wasn't only the water that enticed you...;). I enjoyed this descript passionate verse, visually sensual.
     
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    Whoa, deepy! Now this is what I call classy sexy. :welldone:
     
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    this piece was rather steamy...*wipe'n da mist off my glasses*
    tyte joint sis
    one love
    khasm
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awesome like the vibe...spicy flow if i may say nice one
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Girl...

    :sand:

    This was soooooooooo....

    ~~~HOT~~~

    and u already know it...

    I loved this line the most...I SCREAMED IN E

    and then the "waterfall of smiling eyes"...Now that

    was just plain...gorgeous

    Starstruck,
    Sage​
     
  8. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    first I be looking at all these new avatars...
    wow...trinit, khasm, angelicsage ...alright yawl...

    2nd brother rich...you are devine...
    watz...water, what water :grin: i was hoping it was seen as sensual ..you did and i thank you
    gempis..i like that "classy"..."sexy" it's been awhile since I've heard that word..you know i love that..
    khasm....thanks my brother...you are steamin...and mist comes from your potent flows...
    myblkangel....really glad you liked the piece...been enjoying you too
    and Miss Sage...glad to see you are still with us...hope all is well with you
    glad you liked it..I was going to make it "screamed in g"...but thought
    e could mean ecstasy..so.....you know...thanks

    thanks all of you...you help in my continuance
     
  9. peach_so_sweet

    peach_so_sweet Active Member MEMBER

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    Girl... Girl... Girl... that poem got HOT and HEAVY. :slobber: deepy huh, you really have the right name. ;) ;) ;)
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wet and Wild, into Deep!
     
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