Black Poetry : The Adultress

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by PlayWitItPimp05, Jun 18, 2003.

  1. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ( I wrote this on a minor case of writers block....so i'm kinda insecure about it. I would still love yall love and critique though!!!)


    I stand alone.
    A shadow underneath a light of unique
    sources of which makes one want to seek
    its origin
    You make me
    Yearn with lust throughout my body
    You touch me
    And my walls of strenth break down easily
    You take me
    and into your arms I fall.
    You have my soul under captivity
    Because you know how to make me
    Cream
    With excitement
    I yearn for you like a teen yearns for sexuality.
    I need you like I need air to breathe.
    I love you like you were of my own seed.
    You are the true denotation of beauty.
    And the way you love me
    Brings out the nature of your sincerity.
    You are amazing
    For you quench my soul with your sensuality.
    The way you make love to me
    is unexplicably
    strong-as powerful for the soul
    as the inspirations that makes a deacon preach.
    Your juices play on my tongue lightly
    Like the sound of light jazz can
    Play on your mind softly.
    I love what you did to me
    You addicted me easily
    You are truly a mystery
    You did things to me
    That made me love you so quickly
    That made me trust you completely
    I have let you become me
    Because I love you so deeply.

    And as I awake and open my eyes
    I take time to realize
    That you are only my partner-in-crime
    Simply a dream that I own at night
    And even though I realize it would never be truly right
    I continue this fight
    This battle for your love.
    I am simply your lover, nothing above.
    Only at night do I
    force myself to be blind
    But with the sunrise
    I realize
    You could never, ever, truly be mines.
     
  2. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the magical response when meeting one destiny seems to have thrown at you...knowing that it was meant to be but can never truly be...coz that one belongs to another...so, you accept a LOVER role...and roll with the punches.

    loving the flow of this.
     
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    for you to have writers bloock you did a good job.
    I like spare of the moment writing
     
  4. NADIA*BINTA

    NADIA*BINTA Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    woooo... sexy piece! writers' block?!... naw don't think so... keep letting it flow :)...

    piece
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Writer's block my butt!!! Play this was great!!! :)
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    VEXED OVER LOVE

    What writer's block, you voice is heard!!!

    :toast:
     
  7. JuicyLvsYa

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    writer's block?...humph!!!....lets ya voice be heardd..say dat.
     
  8. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    i agree
    writers block my @ss
    keep on keepin on with da fire
    peace
    khasm
     
  9. skrybe7

    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The subject? tragic and tough, as you know it is.
    The poetry of it? Awesome!
    writer's block... uh huh.
    more like writer's battering ram that
    busts through any blockage turning
    each crumbled piece of what was once
    a wall into merely stepping stones.
     
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    nice flow poet..I like this one...