Poetry Critiques : The 3rd Man


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Jan 14, 2003
The Lone-Star State
The 3rd Man

No you didn't

Go out like that


Mind intact

Long division

How we living

With you dissin'

All that's BLACK

Third planet from the sun

Third person African

Bread leavened

In season


By your own attack ~

Darryl Abdu Omari
aka 1poetsought ~ copyright 2005


Mar 26, 2003
right 1poetsought...thanks bruh for being the 1st man in this instance....
your style is unique in the sense that you say a lot...with saying very little
i took this poem as talking bout the man....the third man in this poem...
your word choice was perfect and i liked the ebonics use of dissin...it help convey where this poem was coming from...from the view point of a black man...
i wouldn't change a thing on this one poet...i love it the way it is...bravo!

one love


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May 13, 2003
Bay Area, CA
Servant of the People
:read: hey brotha 1poet...I remember seeing this in the other forum...

and I cant think of anything that I would want to change on it.

All your writing has your signature style to it...

for me personally I took it from it the same as brotha Khasm did...

Is that what you were aiming for? I really enjoy it just as it is.


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Mar 10, 2004
ATL SHAWTY! Mr. Coli Park
Technical Analyst
Poet Sought I thought this piece was a very straightforward and interesting way to expose Uncle Toms and Tomettes.

I also think that structure of the poem also shows the shallowness of Uncle Tom and Dem. Uncle Tom lacks any depth, so why give him complex and deep stanzas?

However you did not really give a clear indicator of who the third Man was, so if I am wrong about it being an Uncle Tom (Please Don't Shoot :)


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Aug 26, 2003
somewhere ova da rainbow....
Hey 1Poet,

I have always enjoyed your work. I think this was written well and gets your point across how you posed it.To me it tells the veiw point of a black man and how he see the world in his eyes.


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