Black Poetry : THE 1 U WON'T 4GET

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by mzpoetic8705, Dec 29, 2004.

  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just because I’m seventeen
    It doesn’t mean I contain seventeen absolutely charming friends
    Who wanna chill and
    Smoke weed while drinking bottles of sin
    And want to lie in bed ‘till mom gets home from work, then
    Run home to get home before mom gets in from work
    See, I don’t seem to understand the assumptions you tend to make, and
    I don’t agree with every word you say, ‘cause
    I’d like to think that out of these 17 years
    I have proven myself to be honest and true
    And just because I am 17 doesn’t mean I have as less sense as u
    Or that I must do as u do
    But I do
    Have wisdom that is hidden from the lies told by you
    And I refuse to fall into this mold of a “typical 17 year old”
    Because that line is getting old
    I refuse to listen to your egotistical views on how you use to do thangs
    Or how back in yo’ days things were different…and boy have they changed
    Trust me, I’ve heard that line and plenty more before
    And no matter how many times you repeat these clichés
    I will continue to be a 17 year old living in a 17 year old world of thangs
    And I’m not trying to say that this world revolves around me and my views
    But it sure doesn’t revolve around you
    I will be among the many 17 year olds who will break this
    “Typical 17 year old” mold
    See, it’s so easy to judge someone than it is to understand
    And it’s so easy to fall into this world’s outlook on childhood
    Or its views on being young with a premature mind
    As time keeps ticking, the world keeps turnin’
    And just because I don’t do as you do
    Or say as you say
    It doesn’t make me a bad person, but it does make me an individual!
    YES it’s true…I am determined to break the cycle of the many 17-year-old souls
    I am determined to
    And the more determined I am
    The more scared you shall get
    Because I will be that one intellectual, beautiful and
    Charismatic 17 year old that you won’t 4get!

    -MzPoetic 12-15-04
     
  2. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is powerful

    Right on, girl. I agree that many people try to put youth in a box, and lots assume kids are always up to the worst. Just keep being yourself and your truth will shine through. I really dig the way you laid this down. :)
     
  3. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    and she was only 17....lol
    nice inciteful poem...hope to see more
    one love
    khasm
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You're poem is quite impressive, you are determined to just be you. There are more out there like you, teens who walk the straight and narrow don't get as much fanfare. I really enjoyed this piece.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awesome flowing enjoyed the read continue being you...Angel
     
  6. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    in the famous words of lil John,,, what!
    i was really feelin this one. im not even 17 yet, but i've always been one to challenge the fact that some adults like to fit all us teens into one category. From the views of some around me, I should be pregnant, or sneaking out the house, or drinking and such. It sure baffles them to see me instead goin to church on Sunday, no curse come out my mouth, and writin about things constructive, and not about gettin money and all that. And that's right, be the 17 year old they won't forget. Boggle their mind and their view on what reality is. Sometimes i think people generalize everything cause they don't wanna open their eyes and see the beauty of individualism, when it needs to be seen. Have I wrote too much? i felt this one
    keep the flow goin sistah, :welldone: :terrific:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word up sista i feel ya here deeply
     
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