Black Poetry : That Thin Line

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by PositiveMindset, Dec 27, 2003.

  1. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I know sometimes love hurts but it's not supposed 2 bruise...
    Often I wonder what it is that makes a woman choose 2 be abused.
    Some of them don't feel the blows, but feel the harsh words sting.
    They say stuff like he loves me, he's just going through some things.
    Women get with a guy that from the beginning is so nice...
    Then he starts 2 tell her what she can wear & trying 2 control her life.
    Telling her who she can go out with & where she can go...
    She'd better answer her phone when he calls & when 2 be home.
    And she says he loves me, he's just a little insecure...

    He comes home from work, his dinner's nice & hot...
    But it's not what he wants...
    So dinner hits the floor & he hits the roof...
    Calls his woman a stupid whore & gets the 180 proof.
    She tries 2 appease him while she cleans the kitchen...
    As the fire-water releases him from any indiscretion.
    And he flies at her like a heavyweight in the beginning of the 12th round...
    With his eyes bloodshot & deadly, straight jabs & hooks knock her 2 the ground.
    She gets a 10 count...
    He gets his knockout...
    But he loves her, he's just going through rough times.

    She stays home from work cuz her eye's black & her face is swollen...
    And shades can't cover the emotional bruises that she can't help but showin'.
    Cuz every 15 minutes she starts crying uncontrollably...
    Thinking 2 herself that she should've left a million times...
    But she loves him and she can't see herself without him...
    So all day she thought of what she could do 2 bring him satisfaction
    as she absentmindedly ran her fingers along her bruises & scratches.
    Yeah, sometimes love will definitely hurt, but it shouldn't bruise.
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...this was so well scribed. No love shouldn't leave a bruise, on the body or the mind...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u really hit it on the head here
    love is powerful & strong
    if use wrong it hurts mentally & physically
    if use right it's grand fill wit sweetness
     
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    yes..you did indeed paint the thin line in the flow of your scribe..deep indeed.hearing this drop
    Peace
    Blue
     
  5. angelicsage

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    strong message

    shedding light on a problem
    more common place than
    many would think...
    this was a real dose
    of reality...

    love the insight you bring...
     
  6. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very strong message.....

    hopefully this will help a sista or two.....

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    Bruise ?? Oh My Gosh ... call the paramedics ...

    Such talent you have Brother PositiveMindset!!!

    Happy New Year !!!

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  8. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the message hits loud and clear...
    you hit this hard...
    but it was str8....
    nice drop.....peace and HAPPY NEW YEARS!!!!!!
    Angel
     
  9. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My mind, soul, & heart thank U extremely 4 the read & feel, fam.
     
  10. gempis

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    This is extremely powerful because you have painted a vivid picture. Peace, brother Pos
     
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