Black Poetry : That thin line has been crossed

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  1. eternal

    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He was controlling me.
    Girlfriends don't tell me some man from the past
    Asked about my well being, we got to stop talking fast.

    Male friends, yeah right.
    I won't have my man and I'd get lonely at night.
    Moved far away from family and support
    Kept phone calls to a minimum, kept visits short.
    Became a shell of my former self
    Started to have doubts about my mental health
    It's not like he's got lots of wealth
    But he treats me good.
    But is he really treating me like he should

    let me step back a bit.
    Then again he treats me like ****.
    Why can't I have the friends I have known long before him
    What reason to get mad if I hug a friend
    Male or female, he'd act like it was a fatality
    Dog me out, curse me, then question my faithfulness or sexuality.
    Jealousy can kill a person, surprised he's still living
    But I guess that he survived off the love I was giving
    But enough is enough.
    I could take everything else.
    But You will not make me HATE myself.
    I have dealt with everything that you have shoved
    Taken constant verbal beatings, and continued to love
    And you would dare to increase the severity
    Pick up your hand, glare, curse, and hit me.
    No I don't think so, you better leave fast
    I cannot deal with you whipping my a**
    You better leave now, it's over we are through.
    No more chances. If you ever lay hands on me again,
    I WILL kill you.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop here...
    stay strong
    likin the flow..
    peace
    Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ur pen flowin wow!! very well done
     
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    Yes, jealousy can be deadly...liked the way you posed this serious vibe.
     
  5. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I've often wonder how some women
    equate abuse with "he loves me"

    a very emotional piece &
    very nicely written.

    Thanks for sharing

    feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco :heart:
     
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    a truthful scribe....
    jealousy and envy are no good!!!!
    tyte
    one love
    khasm
     
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    I'll be your alibi, "she was with me aaalllll night, officer."

    If only more women would feel like this, men wouldn't get away with the physical & mental abuse that they do.

    Many do it cuz they can, they're women let them.

    Very nice piece.
     
  8. eternal

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    Mzblkangel, thank you for the read!!

    Rich$$ I always feel blessed when you read my piece!! Thanks!!

    Watzinaname, so true so true!!! That's why I got out!
     
  9. eternal

    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Coco, no one should and I thank God that I don't equate abuse with love. Love hurts physically, but never at the hands of the person who loves you. It is a control thing.

    Love ya for the read!!
     
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    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Khasm13, I appreciate your response!!

    LOL, Positive, I will remember that one!!!!
    You better remember to when I am calling from jail and all I am going to say is he tried it again. But in order to do so he will have to ignore the restraining order.;)
     
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