Black Poetry : That Night

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by renee31127, Aug 29, 2003.

  1. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is my first poem here. I was kinda nervous about putting one up but you all are really encouraging that I figured why be scared? So here it is

    That Night

    The cool summer breeze blows across us
    My head against your chest
    I can feel your heart beating
    It’s music to my ears
    As you whisper in my ear
    Your lips brush my cheek
    And I feel it
    Your hand travels from the nape of my neck
    To the small of my back
    Your kiss is ever so soft
    I try to fight it
    But your whole being consumes me
    Makes me forget all prior commitments
    There’s nothing but you and I in this moment
    Words need not be spoken
    I know what you’re thinking without you saying a word
    You lace your fingers in between mine
    And we just lay there
    Stars above us, earth beneath us
    Breathing…heavy
    Pulse…racing
    Bodies…touching
    Legs…intertwined
    How did I get to this place with you
    Just yesterday I couldn’t even remember your name
    Now yours is the only one I can’t get out of my head
    You’re as bad for me as chocolate is for a diabetic
    And I know it
    And it only makes me want you more
     
  2. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i feel you girl. i've been here once upon a time myself. thanks for sharing
     
  3. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: :) :star:

    Welcome to destee, renee! Lovin the contours of your poem. Hope to see more and more from you.
     
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    Welcome! Welocme!

    We are so happy to have you:vwae: This was a very tyte first peom...No need to be nervous girl! We don't bite...its all about love here!!!!!!!!!
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

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    welcome
    let me tell you all of this family really makes you feel like one of them it is so much love in this site...i enjoy my time here and i only been around for a few days....

    i like your writtings as well i hope you share more
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome from above as i bless u some love
    dis was tyte fill up and keep flowin
    happy u join da family of love , peace and happiness
    our bond is our hearts
    u kin now welcome within
     
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    Jazz4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey ladi
    i love these kinds of moments
    and SwtT is right it's all love here
    i'll be lookin out for more
    j.
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    u were scared???
    nervous???
    :jawdrop: wit the way u scribe!?!?! :)
    aint nothin to be scared from wit your skill ma :)
    keep it comin for real...dis is destee we live to love lol ;) :)
    flow on :)
     
  9. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all so much. All your feed back and positive words are so nice to hear. Especially from poets as talented as you all are! I'm really glad I found somewhere I can share my poems and be able to read such amazing ones too. Thanks again for the welcome!
     
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    How did I get to this place with you
    Just yesterday I couldn’t even remember your name
    Now yours is the only one I can’t get out of my head
    You’re as bad for me as chocolate...........(bad can be soooo good)

    ok, 'WHOA"..................now this was hot.....I had so many favorite
    parts I couldn't decided which one to highlight........but I loved the part about not being able to get the name out of your head.......
    Girl, been there........and you articulated it so poetically well.....
    I love it!
     
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