Black Poetry : that just comes....song poem #160

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Aug 8, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Jun 4, 2003
    Messages:
    2,845
    Likes Received:
    36
    Gender:
    Female
    Location:
    nyc
    Ratings:
    +43
    that something that just comes to...
    that something that comes to.....
    he has that something
    that comes to you

    eyes that see come flashing to mind
    lips that taste touch from behind
    arms enfold and you know you feel fine
    He's got that..
    something that comes...

    Last nite in a dream like a girl of l6
    I saw a house jumping over a fence
    dark & mysterious was the house...and the Man
    I woke up and smiled
    that something that a...

    whether it's right or shouldn' be felt
    whether it's left or its wrong to care
    all things work out when he flashes in front
    with that something
    that something
    that something..../
    that comes....
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,978
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,178
    ya on a smooth roll sistah flow on lovin this
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    There are some that have that something, can't put your finger on it, but it's something that just captures you whole. I like this style deepy, it draws the reader inward.
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Aug 26, 2003
    Messages:
    12,660
    Likes Received:
    191
    Location:
    somewhere ova da rainbow....
    Ratings:
    +219
    ok now this was smooth ya pen burning
    loving your style!!!!!
     
  5. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Apr 22, 2003
    Messages:
    9,146
    Likes Received:
    1,097
    Gender:
    Female
    Ratings:
    +1,102
    Agreeing with Watz!
    It is very alluring!
    I can almost hear
    the melody playing
    to this!

    I like...I like!!! Tyte piece!!!
     
  6. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Jun 4, 2003
    Messages:
    2,845
    Likes Received:
    36
    Gender:
    Female
    Location:
    nyc
    Ratings:
    +43
    i appreciate the support..
    letting go to let in...
     
Loading...