Black Poetry : Thank you

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by phenomenalwoman, Oct 3, 2004.

  1. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If I would have heard you knocking
    I still wouldnt have let your a** in
    Now that you're here
    My head is pounding
    Aint got time for this talk show s*** again
    To your yelling and your screaming
    I whisper...I can't hear you fool
    Yes you're penetrating my eardrums
    But mentally, I've blocked you
    As I look at you standing there
    A monkey in its splendor
    Ignorance is bliss
    Outside of your zoo
    Utter annoyance
    Weighing heavily on my mind
    My waiting to exhale moment
    Ruined
    Thanks to you
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a tight drop...
    nice one...thas all i can say
    for i hear ya sis!!!!

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!
    dis was off da hook lady
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i loved it..
    from the opening line
    "if i'd have heard you knocking, i still wouldn't have let your a** in"
    down to the thank you..
    made me smile..seeing/feeling your strength...
    loved it
     
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    Thumbs Up!!!

    :hearthis: LMAO!

    This is a tight drop! :welldone:
     
  6. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    angel, rich, deepy, and caramel, although not in the context of the title of my poem. thank you for commenting.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You laid it down, sounds like he was just a quote. "A monkey in its splendor" ...loved that line, lol. This was so on point sis, do your thang poet.
     
  8. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol watz, that is my favorite line too. thanks for reading
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poet, u captured the sentiments of a recent
    encounter I had...
    I mean...U SO captured it...
    I love that line about the monkey in his splendor...lol
    I LOVED THIS PEACE...

    u r too much...lol

    Much luv,
    Sage
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    NICE DROP !!
     
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