Black Poetry : TERROR IN DA HOOD (who has da rites)

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  1. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Warm droplets of moisture runs
    in a undulating flow of fevered trail
    the pain cast in terror as the night
    stood still as the painful passion grasp

    Da tortured soul strip from her glory
    destruction continues consumming
    in the sighs , moans and laughter
    his filty handz , dirty smelling breath
    sub-due in as she fall in submission

    Like a theif in da night her virginity stolen
    invaded as a solitary porm girl
    in chills , the fears , her tears sweeps deep
    she become the prey , trails of memories
    convicted as a victimized spirit
    the hood draw cold, darken and blue

    She was pure so crystalline and delicate
    until one night of terror the sorrow of her fate
    and the stain of blood dat lingers
    soaked in regrets dampen in broken promises
    her unclean spirit like da indingo blues of funk

    The cry was silent, raped by temptation
    corrupted in the corruption , polluted crypt
    the evil lurks about da moment of tyme stops
    heart race only to pray that life remain
    soon his rotten deposit spring through da thrills
    of climax and in da sadity soul between screams
    her voice she could only hear in her mind ........

    RAPE...WHO HAS DA RITES TO AN VIRGIN

    After reading this piece there was over one hunderd rapes that took
    place in the hoods and against little boys / girls our teens and women
    who now have to face the terror and the scares left behind as each
    one try to recognize self through da mirror of fears , tears and years.

    The cowerly acts of evil men in our society , foresaken and stole da
    rites of these tormented souls had no rites to a virgin , da TERROR!
    sad me as i pray for these victims who been preyed upon by dirty deed.

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    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dangg... my bratha rich u went all out on dis piece
    i was feelin yo flo of truths and of diappointment to the derrty mined men
    u waz so rite on dis, many plp in da hood have 2 face dis, i kno sum plp in my family who got raped and sadly turned gay, its a dayum shame dat dis is goin on, so flo on wit strong truths my bratha'
    and again danggggggggg......


    blackluv and bp

    :terrific: :jawdrop: danggg....
     
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    man i love how you picking up this awareness movement. thats what i like to call what im doing now awareness. and i think this qualify.:smooch: :welldone: :welldone:
     
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    Victims victimized by evil that lurks
    when nobody has the rites to an virgin
    this act happens daily in our communities

    Thankz for feeling my anger at this low life men .
     
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    true dat Nevar , awareness to protect us from becoming a victim
    and to stop the bleeding in the hood , happy you can feel me on this.
     
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    Man, this was intense and forces the reader to be aware of this sad truth.
    One love
     
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    word , it's deep / real and scary and the feeling it leaves behind
    like a bitter taste that never go away , so many have to deal with
    this sorrow and the terror of RAPE.

    Thankz Skrybble7 for reading this passage , seeking answers to end
    this terror and the prey on victims in da hoods.
     
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    man...this is a side i haven't seen from u rich...
    u continue to amaze me after all of these years...smh
    this piece should be published...outstanding poet!!!

    one love
    khasm
     
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    Truely big thankz Khasm and i will indeed put this one out for the world
    to see and hope they understand the reality of it in this society.............

    I will Publish it soon as i have it on Reserved
     
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    it's good to see men taking a stand against rape and in that vein, i appreciated this piece very much. i did find it somewhat hard to follow the rhythm of it, though. i don't know if you wrote it this way as a stylistic device to show the brokenness of the rape victim. if that was the case, forget what i'm saying. if it was done for another reason, i felt that it hindered the message
     
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