Black Poetry : temper

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  1. thespokesman

    thespokesman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Temper

    See.
    A deadly thing
    My mind
    Is a raging bullet
    In the midst of it’s trajectory
    Is a life of regret
    See one it fires
    It’s a deadly thing
    It can be precious if used in certain times
    Its lyrical
    Howevea it neva rhymes
    It’s the oldest emotion in time
    It’s what u get
    Every time
    U bust down a line

    It’s the shell
    Once it explodes
    And ricochets
    Like Ak’s
    That graze
    Innocence
    What is this
    Really
    This thing called temperament
    Can I measure the velocity?
    At which it projects
    Wuz it about, what about it
    That runs the projects
    An caused people to lose projects

    It’s loss is it’s people
    But love gained
    And washed away with the rain
    Some people originate from the womb
    There was pain
    What would u do
    What’s a reaction to an unknown life slain
    Is it a smile when a girl wakes and cries
    And the pork is over fried
    The reaction between the shatter of glass as the bullet pierced thru a happy home
    See u neva got this one
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Uhhuh, yea, temper can turn into rage, and then, God help you. It's a struggle, but we can put the energy into a positive force. This was powerfully put.
     
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    Hmmmm

    the mind...this one took me deep into my own mind's eye...
    This was very deep...like how you compare the mind to a raging bullet, the whole thing was great :wink:
    Nita :heart:
     
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    My mind
    Is a raging bullet....

    i know that feeling this was deep
    and i can relate to this
    flow on...likes ya flow
     
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    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow.. what a fiersome flow :flame:
    Please keep bringin' us the stuff
    that makes us go : Hmmmm...
    Excellent peice !!!

    Many Blessings,
    Akilah
    :read:
     
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    I agree with Akilah - your poetry always makes one sit down and contemplate. This is powerful and thought provoking, spokesman.
     
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