Black Poetry : tell me something good

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by karma55, May 4, 2007.

  1. karma55

    karma55 Active Member MEMBER

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    Tell Me Something Good

    Tell me something good,
    Then make that good come true
    Tell me that you love me,
    Then love me the way you say you do
    Make me feel like I’m here for more than just to lay with you
    Caress my heart with your words
    Then caress my body and respect my lack of curves
    I’m not good with conversation
    Seems I can never find the words
    So I mean it when I say you’ve left me speechless
    My knees begin to weaken when you start speaking
    But I got to know you mean it,
    And that I’m more than just convenient.
    So do what you say if you saying what you mean,
    Make me feel like your queen!
    Let’s dream and create our on form of communication,
    Show me its more than just infatuation
    Cause I adore you
    You got me fascinated
    Now all I need for you to do is illustrate it
    I’m talking three-dimensional
    Don’t want no accidental love affair
    So show me it’s intentional
    Otherwise you’re just another one of those other guys
    And heartache is preventable
    i long for love thats tangible
    and if thats not with you
    now its understandable
    just let me know so you wont be held accountable
    for not backing up your words and givin me wat i deserve
    i dont ask you for much only what im worth
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What you want is something real, shared adoration. You've expressed what many have experienced, well posed piece.
     
  3. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can totally relate sis, don't just tell me about the labor pains...show me the baby.
    Great piece poet, great piece....:welldone:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well now u want to see not feel da deal ......awesome flow to relate too
     
  5. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    karma55:
    Really feeln' you on this scribe.
    Enjoyed the read.

    Much Luv
     
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