Black Poetry : tell me my friend (comparing notes; inspired by N2urSoul's "Notes")

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tell me my friend
    of the notes you
    saw written with lemon juice
    on the parchment
    waiting for the night to
    make the words clearer

    and I'll tell you...

    I too have been subject to
    synthesized personal psalms
    to my soul
    and now I'm left looking for
    substance
    something real
    this digitally mastered
    processed creation is procreating
    a blues song that I wished I had fogotten

    she never knew the song I sang
    for her even though she listened
    to it myriad times
    maybe she listened to it with the
    wrong ear or her own
    unsyncopated cadence

    right
    right
    left right
    left left left
    right

    the chambers of her heart
    locked me down and tortured me
    with what I would never feel

    reciprocity

    she'd never sing the song
    I sang to her / she never
    took a moment to learn the words.

    (c)2002 blakverb
     
  2. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    don'tcha hate that. when you know the words are perfect...but you can't get the music to match...so the lyrics seem off key and the drum beat is off beat...and one heart flutters while the other goes into an irregular fibr(il)lation pattern.

    some of us just don't take the time to learn the other's song.:(

    THAT'S REAL, Blak.
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak

    I know this all too well!!! I'm afraid the word "relate" is only relative because to me that word is in some ways -- not-- strong enough to express just how I feel when I do read your "comparing notes"....

    How wonderfully you have articulated
    your version(s) to me!!

    :heart: N2
     
  4. blakverb

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    peeps..thank you

    blak
     
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