Black Poetry : Tell it walking...

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  1. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    TELL IT WALKING...

    I thought I heard you say, that day...
    while with the preacher man.
    "I'll love this girl with all my heart,
    and in harm's way :fight: ...I'll stand.

    No man, can ever share the joy...
    I now hold in my soul,
    I shouted out :hearthis: ...to all the world...
    "She's mine ...to have and hold"

    You said those things in the proudest way,
    and you lead me to believe it was true.
    if all these things, are indeed a fact,
    why the hell, am I sitting here blue?

    Please don't :nono: explain a thing to me
    your actions speaks louder than words
    you did everything, but step on my pride
    all your dirt, was clearly heard.

    I won't stoop down to the level you fell
    and I won't let you lead me ...astray,
    just gather all your belongings ...
    and kindly ...be on your way.

    I can't let you destroy, what's left of my life,
    so just go on, do as you choose.
    I don't even care to mend what we had
    but in the end...it's you who'll lose.
    :bye:
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

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    you took me in a poetic whirl wind this was full i really feel this scribe....Angel
     
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    well then ok i'll go
    before i do remember
    i too love u through & through

    I guess u close the vault
    tyte foresay flow sis.......
     
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    And strength rises up to conquer the hurt. Love this and what you're sayin, queen.
     
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    You wrote a powerful scribe as per your usual. As far as relationships go, you put your all into trying to make it work, hopefully the other person does the same, and put it into God's hands. Peace queent.
     
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    Very Nice. Well written and expressed. Your right. Actions does speak louder than words. But some words are never spoken.

    When the heart and sprit is broken. I recall my mother told me. Never go to sleep mad, or upset. Because that is how you will wake up. If today is cloudy, tommorrow may be also. As long as love has a hold on you. It is better to be close, if you can't get closer. To the one you care about.

    One can never give up hope, or an opportunity to make sense of and peace in one's life, or right a wrong even if it is never 100% done. I tried! Is what I want written on my stone.


    To all who are maried, been married, and to those who will be married sometime in life. Hold your heart near, keep your love's heart closer.

    Love can hurt!

    To have and hold, till death do you part. Means you will be there until there is no beat in your heart. The day you marry you may be in a trance. But I heard every word of the sermon that was made. I vowed to love you and if I fall short. It wasn't because of you. It was my failings that were short. If a flame or ember still exist in our hearts. Then why are we wasting time and space apart. I love you my dear. Can you hear me exclaim. I said I was sorry, you know my name. Look at what I have done. Some not so good, not all bad. I'm sorry dear heart that I made you sad. Please lets talk. It is the healing thought.
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    The one thing I've noticed in your poetry is that you have an uncanny ability to take your reader there...to that place where they feel what you feel.

    Very nice poem...sweet...and straight to the point.

    :thanks: for sharing your life with us through your poetry.

    :toast:
     
  8. Khasm13

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    as always queen...you get right to the point in your scribes...there is no hide'n the conclusion in your joints...this one took me there poetically...i hope i neva have to hear this though...it could be ruff...lol
    keep flowin sis...i hear ya

    one love
    khasm
     
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    peace Queen,

    true indeed it is he who has lost........he has lost that life giving force only overstood by those who appreciate that force we call God's first creation.... our Nubian Queens.

    He has lost more than he can possibly imagine & will only realize when he looks back & see's that your head is still high & u have not tripped or fallen, but rather have been elevated to another level........

    You always paint the perfect picture thru your scribes.............!

    peace as always
     
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    Walk On By...

    Baby, you're the Queen of the damned.

    Much love :hearts2:
     
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