Quiet Poetry Lounge : TELL IT WALKING...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by queentswana, Sep 12, 2004.

  1. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I thought I heard you say, that day...
    while with the preacher man.
    "I'll love this girl with all my :heart: heart,
    and in harm's way :bazooka: ...I'll stand.

    No man, can ever share the joy...
    I now hold in my soul,
    I shouted out...to all the world...
    "She's mine :love: ...to have and hold"

    You said those things in the proudest way,
    and you lead me to believe it was true.
    if all these things, are indeed a fact,
    why the hell, am I sitting here blue?

    Please don't :nono: explain a thing to me
    your actions speaks louder than words
    you did everything, but step on my pride
    all your dirt, was clearly heard.

    I won't stoop down to the level you fell
    and I won't let you lead me ...astray,
    just gather all your belongings ...
    and kindly ...be on your way.

    I can't let you destroy, :bomb: what's left of my life,
    so just go on, do as you choose.
    I don't even care to mend what we had
    but in the end...it's you who'll lose.​
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, you dropped a bomb here. It's so sad when a situation gets so bad, that you don't want to even think about fixing it somehow, let alone doing the actual work. Expressed on point poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    LOOK OUT NOW U REALLY DOING IT UP WHEWWWWWWWWWW!!!
    REALLY LIKE DIS PIECE SIS.
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I likes this...your pen is hot i see...nice drop flow on.....
     
  5. bigdrizzle

    bigdrizzle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    U must have went thru alot...U alwayz kicking a brotha out the crib!
     
  6. oraiders11

    oraiders11 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Words/Actions

    All I can do is clap my hands on this one. It is a very nice piece. Continue being a strong writer and we will continue being captive.

    :jump:
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi oraiders11, it's a honor to read you again..good to see you active.
    Thanks for the support on this piece, hope to see more of you:jump:
     
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    queentswana:
    I could feel your every word and I know
    you meant them when said them.
    I too have wallked this path.
    Nice write sista.

    It appears that you and brotha Keita worked
    things out. That is wonderful you 2 seem
    to love each a lot. A poetic couple that's really nice.


    Much luv
     
  9. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As we know for a fact, everyday ...ain't Sunday
    thank you so much
     
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