Black Poetry : Tears

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  1. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I see the sky
    in her heavy blue garment
    in her lap lay
    a lake full of water

    waiting to be unleashed
    the pain to be relieved

    she shivers and shifts
    and then she pours out her tears
    that which to her is truly dear

    I see the sky
    clear and naked
    and I thank her
    for this gift sacred.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    simply beautiful .........
     
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    Thanks a lot Rich!:)
    It still needs some work though:)
     
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    It read beautiful and if you polish it up , it would be in perfection......I really enjoyed this piece
     
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    thought provoking.

    reminds me of so many blues songs.:(

    nicely done
     
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    Thanks a lot baller! I really appreciate the props. :)
     
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