Black Poetry : Tears

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  1. imoonlitskies

    imoonlitskies Member MEMBER

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    Tears (Simple Interpretation/For Keshia)

    Droplets of crystal blue
    Continuously flowing…

    I'm trying to stop the
    Pain but it keeps on going
    No cause or reason
    It's constantly growing
    Into a state of mind that
    I can’t control
    I plea to be consoled
    To be made whole
    So I can be liberated, released, and renewed
    From this mood
    That bogs me down in quicksand
    I attempt to stand
    But I fail
    Instead I stay confined to this jail
    Where I am frail
    Though I try to prevail
    But my attempts mean nothing
    Because it all ends up the same
    And time moves slowly
    As I begin to go insane
    And there is nothing left to do
    But to cry these lonely tears
    Oh how I yearn for you to be near
    Take me away from all my fears
    And make them disappear
    Into nothingness
    Into a place that doesn’t exist
    Because I am depressed
    By the stress
    That has me constantly suppressed
    I possess
    No delight
    In this life
    Only strife

    …Droplets of crystal blue
    Still continuously flowing
    I'm trying to stop the
    Pain but it keeps on going
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well versed wit deep compassion & emotion
    flow on !
     
  3. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i enjoyed the way you worded this prose poet. This poem was very intense and heartfelt. Keep the flow goin.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Really really diggin this deep and heartfelt flow. Is this an answer poem?
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really felt this poet, the words you posed so described the depths of what the pain can be. And the rhymes were off the hook. Well written piece indeed.
     
  6. LibertyLady

    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aww i feld youre mood....
    beautifull writing

    o come here ...
    huge .....
    from a snotty and head glowing poet (i have the flu right now ...lol)



    i know ...
    but hey (saying it in a cheer up tone)
    remember god is great...
    and dont place anyone above him..
    cause you will feel it you know..
    and know there is someone for eveybody...
    and that he can take the pain away...






    Lovelibertylady:heart:
     
  7. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was very well posed enjoyed the poetic ride
     
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