Black Poetry : tears

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Aug 26, 2003.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    her pain held her in the dark
    the walls seemed to collapse
    around her universe
    her heart felt
    like stone, crumbling stone,
    that knew no light, only the pain
    that held her.

    her thoughts wept
    blak tears that carressed her cheeks
    and sighed as they passed her chin
    and dropped onto the concrete floor.


    the only sound she could hear
    was the night wispers that
    pounded in her ears

    over and over....
    and the screams
    that birthed echos
    in the midnight
    :(
     
  2. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    such pain so delicately and effectively depicted...I pray for the healing of this soul :)
     
  3. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks triniti, :heart:
     
  4. angelicsage

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    Story, this was sooooo well crafted, great imagery and emotion!

    Encore!
     
  5. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u for reading me angelic, i'm glad that u liked it,
    much luv,:heart:
    -story
     
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    your flow
    is so deep sistah
    as i read and feel the pain
    you have painted
    very nice
    much love to you
    Peace
     
  7. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks blu, much love,:heart:
     
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    Beautiful as always, story. You have great talent. :)
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks gempis much :heart:
     
  10. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very beautiful and nice.....
     
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