Black Poetry : Tears of a REAL man (for choc and sheik)

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  1. A007

    A007 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Crying is not something that I normally do
    but I weep now because of the
    self doubt and deep despair
    that he left while passing through

    these tears are the amends
    these tears are for you.

    they are not an attempt at helpless pity
    for I respect you for breaking the curse
    they are the sorrow born of concern
    and love that hurts because you still hurt

    these tears i shed for you
    give little shelter
    yet I can not stop their flow
    they are in protest
    of indiscribable cowardess
    of a weak, evil "man" with a black soul

    for the day he injured your person
    I hate
    for the way he crushed your trust
    I ask why
    for the time wounded your spirit
    I break
    for the crime that has no justice
    I cry

    I want to wrap my love around
    the anguish that lies inside
    and sheild you from the agony
    be the friend in which you can confide

    provide your heart
    with the warmth and security
    that faith breeds
    to promote healing
    plant peace, joy and self love as seeds

    so you will love you
    the way that I love you

    so I stand here poised
    with broad shoulders
    ready to bare the budern
    of the life he left in disarray
    with a real man's apology
    an open heart and tears determined
    to carry all of the
    pain away
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful heartfelt piece poet...thanks for sharing that art.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was so deeply felt within .......
     
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    Thank you so much, I felt all of the love you sent my way in this piece. There will be many times I myself may want to sit and cry because I feel alone but thanks to you and my Destee family I know that I am not and never again will be alone.
     
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    i want to say that i am very appreciative of u taking time out to compose such a heartfelt peice to me n my big sister.u are proof that all men wont harm me like ive thoght for the majority of my years,thank u darling i know that i have a home here with u guys n i wont be judged for the things im going thru n i can share honestly without rumors circulating. i love u guys. allah bless ya heart boo,u made me feel accepted n loved for a change i havent felt that in ages
     
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    Brother, the pen you wrote with must have been blessed.

    Lovely flow. Not so great on the capitalization though, but that's just me being picky.

    Much appreciated.

    ~Ikoro
     
  7. A007

    A007 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Choc and Sheik ,

    I just wanted yall to know that there are strong men out there who know how to cherish our queens as mothers, sisters, and mates. I pray that both of you find your way back to peace and love. Destee is a place where you can see that love abounds from our people. I wish I could hug yall, but since I can't, take this poem as my display of affection.

    Ikoro.....lol....you will also notice that it is not punctuated as it should be. Sorry.
     
  8. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A007:
    This piece is truely beautiful.
    I am so moved by your words and
    the luv you show. I want to hug u
    for being so kind and sincere to them.
    Awesome scribe with an awesome
    heart to match.
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a real nice piece poet
    it was kind of hard for me to read because of the structure
    most ppl usually write in bars and its two lines for every bar
    nice piece poet work on ryhming scheme
    7/10
    uno
     
  10. A007

    A007 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you 4ever.

    Tantrum, Have you ever read Caged Bird, Phenominal Woman or the thousands of other poems by professionals which are not written in "bars"? Many of them don't even make an attempt at rhyming. All poems are not and SHOULD not be AB AB or AA BB rhyme schemes because our feelings do not necessarily fit into that neat little box. Thanks for the response.
     
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