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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by PloeMorphic, Jan 2, 2003.

  1. PloeMorphic

    PloeMorphic Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I’m tired of leaving messages saying I love you and I miss you and you got me but wait a minute I don’t have you
    I’m tired of having thoughts of maybe he will call in the next week or two
    Wandering why he can’t even pencil me in his schedule
    I’m tired of getting he say she say responses
    I’m tired of you complaining about how tired you are from investing your time in the next chick
    Telling her same script you once told me
    I am tired of putting work and time into you
    I’m tired of your thoughts invading my thoughts
    It seems like my conditioning were already preconditioned with your previous condition
    I ‘m tired of your thoughts invading my Rem cycle
    I’m tired of being in love alone
    I’m tired of your painful existence in my life
    I’m tired of my words getting marinated with your thoughts
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    My thoughts were invaded by his presence
    And
    My silence were questioned by his pursed lips
    His presence decreases my breath sounds
    My future vital signs were tampered with by his intentions
    His intentions craved my destruction
    My destruction embraced his intentions
    His words burned like an inferno
    I know ya will like me to continue but wait a minute
    I am too hot to be stressed, so enough negativity
    See I rebuked his so-called thoughts
    Because I have come to the understanding that he will not prevail against my brutal strength
    His intentions will not decide the existence of vital signs in my future dreams and seeds
    I’m sure his absence will eventually be forgotten like a bad habit
    But I’m positive that his thoughts will no longer preconditioned my thoughts cause
    I just lost my thought…
    So he ain’t got nothing to play with
     
  2. Kimdricka

    Kimdricka Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ooohhh i like, i like, i like, cause i can relate, i can relate, I CAN RELATE!! i feel you like a MF on this one right here. i feel you like feeling is the only 1 of my five senses that work. Exceptionally put together! ;)

    Kim
     
  3. PloeMorphic

    PloeMorphic Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah gal

    thanks gal. you know things get real. i'm tired of broken verbs by our blak males
     
  4. Kimdricka

    Kimdricka Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I couldn't agree more. sumthin's gotta change!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    time to make dat change dis breaks it down
    what more can i say !!! flow on .
     
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    that was tight :D
     
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    I rise , I rise, the curse has been broken. Very well written