Black Poetry : Talking With The Homeless

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by THEONE, May 7, 2004.

  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    TRYING Something a little different for me, Trying not to write, anymore, just give it to you raw off the top of my head, Hope U likes tellme whatcha think.



    Im the one in the cornor under that card board box
    Yeah I beg, so what, I didnt ask to be put in this spot!
    Society doesnt't understand, but let me explain
    Let anyone you Working Americans take my place and see how much you complain,
    You live out here and watch faces grimmace, like this what I chose to do
    People dont understand that I played the game.. my cards just didint fall thru
    I get comments like, get a job, as if I havent' been trying for years
    You think I like living on the streets, the cold last night brought me to tears
    Where's your family? The next question they like to ask
    My family's the rest of the homeless people that like to ask for cash
    Oh, MY FAMILY, FAMILY... well there just like you
    Doing a little better than a brotha, so they frown apon me too.
    Nobody sees me for the man I reallly be
    No money, No Job, is there even a such things as ME?
    Am I really beneath society cause I got a bad break
    Everytime a brotha struggles its not of his own mistakes
    Im the one in the cornor under the cardboard box
    All I really wait for is someone to stop!
    Im the one in the cornor under the cardboard box
    Please share the love...... What if this was your spot!


    This is dedicated to the many man and women that I see trying to make it day to day regardless of there situations.

    By: Lj
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh boy....this poem almost moved me to tears dang...*smh* I just adored it and if this came off the top of your head, ...never wear a hat ;) that was a awesome poem and oh how true it was. Whenever I walk the streets...I feel their pain.
    thanks for sharing such a moving piece.
     
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    this was awesome and well felt the reality of life and our true struggle
    in many shapes and forms
     
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    aw this is just beautiful. I've thought some of the same things but you put it so well. Wow, you are talented
     
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    Flowing of the top of your head? Maybe, but still deep. I wrote a poem a little while ago about the conequences of living paycheck to paycheck, I get cha, this was, as usual, so well written.
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tHNKS TANK U
     
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    yeah
    this flow that came from the top of your head
    felt like it came from the depth of your heart
    because i'm feeling this drop for real
    gotta spread that love
    flow on...
    Peace~n~Love
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    WoW!!!

    What an eye opener. This poem could teach us all alot. We often lQQk down on people because of their situation, but with a twist of fate we all could be in that same position in a blink of an eye. THEONE, you know I'm always diggin ya work. You could have talked about anything, but you dropped this on us. This here is deep!
    I love the way you free floEd...and the way you spoke from your heart. Lovin it brother. :wave:
    :heart:Nita:heat:
     
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    good lookin out for the downtrodden
    let us know that they are not forgotten
    tyte scribe son...
    one love
    khasm
     
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    This is a wonderful
    piece in recognition
    of our less fortunate!
    I love what you did here!
    You really are THEONE! :hot:
     
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