Black Poetry : Talk about disappointment, well...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Oct 9, 2003.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it's been 2 months
    no touching
    no bumping
    so tonight
    i thought it was right
    to make the mood ours
    wishing and hoping it'd last for hours

    he walked through my door...

    looking good, driving a sistah wild
    while I was wearing nothing but a smile
    he walks over to where I stand
    carresses me with his hand
    nibbling and kissing on my neck
    then his fingertips slowly crept
    to my spot
    he rubbed it right, had me hot
    picks me up and takes me to the room
    where music is playing and filled with the scent of my perfume

    BUT...

    as soon as he got inside this
    I knew that he liked it
    cuz he started going faster than the enegizer bunny
    so I had to tell him to "slow down honey"
    And he's pushing and grinding
    But let me tell you, I wasnt finding
    any pleasure, I just couldnt feel it
    But I got myself into this, so I guess I gotta deal with it
    He's asking "whats my name?"
    So I figure I'd play along with his game
    Fake moaning and calling him the king
    when he had me hot and didnt do a [email protected] thing
    After 8 minutes tops, he cums faster than tomorrow
    And Im so angry... but I cant show the sorrow

    Then he has the nerve to ask me...

    "so how was it?"

    And you know what I said....?

    "Baby, you've had a long day, you want something to eat?" ;)
     
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    lol nice flow
     
  3. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks girl lol
     
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    lol...only you girl....this is tyte...
     
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    LOL...Girl you are sumthin else...
    This was hillarious...and your ending...
    Poeticallyspeakin that's why I read you
    because you're so outspoken and I never
    know what your going to say next....
    This piece was exciting and fun!
     
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    LoL
    :lol:
    :laugh: gurl u are a crack up lol
     
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    girl, I think someone forgot to put the sandwich in your happy meal.
    :laugh: :rolling:

    just kiddin, sweetie. this was tighter than my wallet. ;)
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :lol::lol::Lol::lol::lol::lol::lol:;...oh man..you are hilarous
     
  9. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LMAO....

    You know I had to write something to make yall laugh. Ima clown, thought yall knew by now...LoL. Plus I was thinking about this. I was like "[email protected], I wonder what Id say after someone said that to me?" And then I thought about it n I was like shhhhhh****ttttttttt, he'd have to do sumthin. Cant leave me empty handed lol. Naw, but thanks yall, im glad u can feel it.
     
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    Chile you bring me laughter and joy...and acknowledgement...

    You never cease to amaze is right! Funny, arousing and imaginative, I roared a loud in the end....You are so classy!
    I probably would have told the brother to get off of me...but then they do have such fragile ego's! Sweating your doo out for nothing and having to fake the big O too! Grace under pressure honey !

    Blessings On Ya House!:rolling: :blush:
     
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