Black Poetry : Taking this to anotha level.........

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by nevar, Jun 7, 2006.

  1. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    How can you take this to anotha level
    When all I want is been picked up with a shovel

    Sometimes I feel I've been cheated
    And the feeling for you is becoming heating
    Needing

    You to fulfill my wish and desires
    Every time we talk there's fire

    But you dont know
    You go

    On your merry way
    Go on your day

    With out a clue
    That in my heart and my Lips saying I could love you

    Its hard hearing about your life
    Its hard hearing about your wife

    Its hard even not to call your name
    Its hard for me and this pretending is driving me insane

    Call to leave you inspirational notes
    While I'll leave my feeling lodge in my throat

    Ready to blurt out what I really feel
    But I'm ?uestioning if this is real

    How or why did it ever be this way
    Why did I fall in love with you with the words you say

    I cant go on like this
    When my mind wants an innocent kiss

    From you
    Dont know what to do

    Because Im in between reality and fantasy
    Please dont banish me

    In the hell that Im use to
    I need you

    Even tho' you will never need me
    Free

    Me from this guilt
    We havent even built

    A foundation
    This sensation

    Has to stop
    Cant lie your prescence alone is making me hot
    I got

    To stop lusting for something I will never see
    I know it will be hard for you to forget about me
    As we

    Both Pretend
    That we could never in this lifetime be more than friends
    I send

    to you My love in the shape of a heart
    Its was you who moved me from the start

    As I unsucessfully try

    Taking this to anotha level.........


    When you do finally get to this love you will understand why I feel I must back off for a little while. But I hope and pray that your smiles will keep coming for me.

    Sincerely,

    Nevar!!!!!!!!!!!!
    :hearts2:
     
  2. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow... what a great flow.

    Because Im in between reality and fantasy
    Please dont banish me
    :blowkiss:

    Sometimes I feel I've been cheated

    You haven't been cheated. If you feel something new. Never felt before. It is a blessing your heart can see. Under the day to day life. You never learn the truth. It can't be revealed always and is not as it appears. Happiness is if one say's so. Happy is realitive to reciprical effection. In other words, love must flow both ways.

    It is possible for one way love. If channeled it can help one grow into a beautiful and loving one to behold. The one finally capturing it is truly blessed.

    I believe there should be. No secrets among friends.
     
  3. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    wow....a great write nevar....I've felt this way also....many a times.....like how you set it up....it keep me hooked till the end....

    How or why did it ever be this way
    Why did I fall in love with you with the words you say

    that says it all......
     
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    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow that poem was on another level poet keep doing your thing and that road you walk i pray will get alot easier.

    one love
     
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    :wave: Hey Love bird, this was truly from your heart. I'm sure the lucky guy(QQn) will appreciate your straightfowardness. In due time the love you crave will come your way.

    Beautiful piece poet:love:
     
  6. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks to all who replied to my poem. hodee thanks for giving me some hope/
    abstract thanks for the wonderful critique im so glad you liked it/ to blacksoul thanks for the kind words you've always given me/ to spicy so icy thanks for that love always.
    :smooch:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Any level need no shovel
    to scoop ya love
    take it up higher above
    so u know ya not cheated
    from all this rapture heated
    dat's got me in steam
    thinking and living a dream
    it's been mold da foundation
    what's so solid is da sensation
    what seem unseen is clear
    through da mirror i be dear
    can't say what da future be
    da smile ur forever see
    and from da written words
    like 1 , 2 , 3
    and how it all came to be
    of the we how can it be
    as i try to take it to da next level.

     
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    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very very nice nevar:picture:
     
  9. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks cursed heart for the love that was shown always.
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    to richy rich$$$$$$.....

    its like this why won't you let it gro
    the love you feel for me you wont let it sho

    when i think i've touched a part of you
    you run away and hide leaving a poor gurl like me pondering
    on what it is i need to do

    this back and forth game
    has me sometimes not to utter your name
    there's no need for me to blame

    anyone
    what's done is done
    the sum

    of this is 2-1=1
    for me to await you patiently until the sun

    comes down
    and i get up with a frown

    because you didnt want to take this chance
    to xplore this romance
    so i ask for one last dance

    as i forever in my mind let you go
    you in this lifetime never know

    that i gladly wanted to

    Taking this to anotha level..............
     
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