Quiet Poetry Lounge : Taking out the trash

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by phenomenalwoman, Feb 15, 2004.

  1. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I keep everything
    Physically, mentally, literally
    Everything
    Faded pictures…mental pictures
    Love notes…mental notes
    I keep them in a box
    I keep everything
    Things you said
    Things you did
    Things you gave
    Everything
    The pain
    The hurt
    The joy
    The love
    The hate
    All together in one box
    I’m going to the dumpster today
    Ridding myself of the box
    Ridding myself of everything
    Ridding myself of you
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now, I like the way you used these visuals to represent a mental cleansing of this man from your life. Nice title too.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh gosh this was tight
    the trash is indeed out
    feeling your drop
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    cojamalik Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes you have to getrid of old junk to make roo for somethig new.
    VERY NICE POEM!!!!!!!!!!
     
  5. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks watz, blue and coja...out with the old and in with the new
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaaaa!!
    dis was a trash hit !
    take it all out wow ........
     
  7. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love rich, i took the trash out
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i see sometime we must clean house for peace of mind
    flow on sistah flow on
     
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    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ouch.....yeah girl, get rid of all of it. No sense holding on to garbage. Nice. That was a great poem. Much Love
     
  10. DayDream

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    My Story...

    This piece hit home because I do keep everything in a box...literally and it IS about time for me to take out the trash. Thank you for this poem!
     
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