Black Poetry : Taking Notes

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  1. Roxanne

    Roxanne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Taking Notes

    He said
    You gonna make me beat your *** twice
    And all I was thinking of was
    How I loved him and wanted to be his wife
    Spend my life with him
    Even when I knew
    I didn’t know nothing about him
    Cept that we had different reservations
    His take outs and drive thru
    Mine home grown stew and a nice glass of wine
    Comfort food
    We were two of a different kind and a different suit
    Him a spade and a club would do
    Leaving me with hearts and hopes for diamonds
    But sometimes a piece of coal is just a piece of coal
    We didn’t even have chemistry
    So the matter had no formula
    Our conversation
    Calculated an explosion
    The good kind and the bad
    And what's sad that this is why
    When he said
    You gonna make me beat your *** twice
    All I was thinking of was
    I just might…
    Our love was Algebra
    Unknown variables tryin to solve
    Knowing you aint
    Ever really needed to know this in real life
    See, we couldn’t possibly be two positive
    More like two negatives
    Making a false positive
    Even if I knew the answer
    The computations were all wrong
    I flunked his class
    Found myself with another brother
    In fact I found myself
    Falling in love or falling in something…
    With his twin
    Recognized the resemblance when
    He said
    You gonna make me beat your *** twice
    And all I was thinking of was
    Humph that would be a first
    Remembering the threat of scars
    From the last hurt
    Seeing he and me six feet under dirt
    I broke the curse
    I said
    I heard all that before
    At least be an original work of art
    Start by creating something different
    Like be my geography
    Take me to uncharted places
    I ain’t soared to before
    Like you adoring me
    Give me recess so you and I can
    Talk like bestfriends
    Love me like we at gym
    ‘Cuz we both know we love to ball
    Converse like a well versed
    Theater dialogue
    Just LOVE me
    Just once…
    Beside beating my *** twice
    Seems more like hard work
    We both knew
    That aint something he was use to doing
    So, I gave him a pass
    We broke on principle
    I can’t lie
    I got caught slipping
    Now, I am suspended
    Mind writing standards:
    I can’t imagine living my life, loving someone who “Ima make”. beat my *** twice
    I can’t imagine living my life, loving someone who “Ima make”? beat my *** twice
    I can’t imagine living my life, loving someone who “Ima make”! beat my **** twice

    But I know Ima flunk again
    If I end up stuck with another twin as my teacher
    He schooled me…
    I’ll pass.
     
  2. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was so well written I don't even know what to say. You know it's good when you leave a poet speechless. :welldone:
     
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    Thank you!

    I was inspired by over hearing some young people argue and then the script wrote itself.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the deep depth put into this was like reading someone mind and there life of pain
    flow on sis...........
     
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    an original...indeed.

    keep thee away from PAIN...and all those who causes you PAIN. again...you gon make me beat yo sweetness twice. THAT AIN'T NO LIFE to live. VERY WELL WRITTEN.
     
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