Black Poetry : Take Out

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Bluewater, Jan 7, 2008.

  1. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What is brought to my plate?

    Is it a re-conditioning of that natural me
    Erasing a small part of myself
    Just to fit into a zone
    That perhaps I never belong
    Always in search of finding
    Myself and then becoming
    Lost in the process.
    So the plate once again is full
    And there no room for more,
    Yet it piles up even higher.
    No longer eating
    Slowly starving
    It's just too much.
    For my eyes,
    To take in.
    The Heart is burning
    From the taste of it,
    from the sight of it.
    The taste bud dissolves.
    and the mind and body starve
    Because what is before me
    on the plate.
    Has taken the appetite away.
    Is it a re-conditioning of the natural me?
    A wish to belong,
    Forcing my self to like
    whats set before me.
    Just to dine in the same circle.
    I could use a new recipe
    Yet I'm
    Finding myself using
    the same seasoning from the
    past cafe.
    Do I Walk away?
    Dine in?
    I don't know
    I'm still trying to find me
    and it's not in the four walls of
    my pantry. I look and see
    I'm still missing
    some vital ingredient
    for a new something

    The world is to
    small a place to
    always dine alone.
    I want to take in
    as much as I can.
    I'll just be

    Bringing my own bag
    With enough to share

    bon appetit
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sound like u got a new recipe
    and yes u carry out only to dine in
    and u not alone .......


    I love this piece sister Bluewater
     
  3. watzinaname

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    You have a way of choosing just the right words to your pieces, so that if the reader hasn't experienced the same, they can taste those feelings. I've brown bagged it on many occasions, superb write.
     
  4. Bluewater

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    Thank you so much brother Rich and Sister wazi,
    for taking the time to read this drop.
    It's appreciated sincerely


    Peace~N~Love
     
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    Still feeling this drop.
     
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    wow... Sister BW this is deep...... like the comparisons you make...

    got me thinking! ....

    I know I still take things in that I know "give me heartburn"..... and it truly is to fit into a circle that has exhausted me long ago.....

    like what u serving sis...... i'll take seconds and thirds.. and fourths.... and........... :)
     
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    hmmmm

    very on-point write. you stayed in sequence with the title not forgetting to refer back to doggy bags, take out, dining, food, etc. very captivating, nice wordplay, and unusual but, catchy content. I am becoming a fan of yours.
     
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    :10200: This was electric!!!!!! And oh so real...we are always unsatisfied with out plates....and a lot of the time we are served up a mess!!!!!!!
    I feel you Sis...Get Your Cheffin on Point!!!!!!! Serve up your life with exquisite tastes of the MOST Refined Dine and Rock Your Flow doing it!!!!!!
    ~BLESS Blue Water~

    Maybe we can open Up a Restaurant Together!!!!! Whatta ya say???:D
     
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    I loved this Sis BlueWater...to stay or to go? Hmmm! I think I'll take mine to-go...lol!!!!
     
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    Thank you so much
    Miss Lady
    Sha'iyn
    PLATINUMILLITY1
    HopelisRomantic
    For sharing your love and thoughts on my drop.
    I had no idea what direction this was going into
    When I release the first line.
    And I thank you for seeing how I was feeling.
    Much love poets.lol..
    Keep the flows blazing.

    Peace~N~Love