Black Poetry : Take of Your Shoes Girl!

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  1. klabarron

    klabarron Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    How much does a memory weigh?
    Tons upon tons upon a bewildered mind.
    How long does a feeling last?
    Eons of eternity’s new days in a broken heart.
    How deep is the deepest fall in love?
    To deep; upon deep.
    A trillion leagues beneath the deep blues sea.
    Girl, take of your shoes!

    Get out of my heart and head so I can embrace my today and live for tomorrow.
    The past. The memory of your smile, your cries,
    your ejaculatory whimper all still ring in the ear of my soul.
    Silence! Be silent! I cry from within but even in the still of the moment
    I feel the gentle press of your nails into my back; your soft touch on my brow.
    Take off yours shoes!

    Stop trampling the memory chords of my preoccupied mind.
    Why must you continue to dance a melody to euphoric proportions
    and keep the fresh scent of your love in my nostrils and raise a rise the only
    your exotic freedom could raise?
    Please take of your shoes!

    In you. In the memories of my mind I feel the red hot heat of our passion.
    I sense a soothing orange that fades to a sad blue as we sit before a yellow
    sunrise on the horizon of recollection, reminiscence, and retrospection.
    Why are you still wearing your shoes?
     
  2. Rashad

    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I see ya bra!

    Tyte flow. I'm feel'n this piece bra.
    Thanks for the read.
    Peace.:toast:
     
  3. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    kla,

    true scribing within the crafting of this piece...

    exquisite poet...

    one.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man dis here

    reach out and touch coz of so much reality
    tyght and on point man .....:toast:
     
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    Danilyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really like this one, poet. Keep vibin and scribin!:)
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    too

    real! Drowning in the imagery, my brotha! yes!!!

    a
     
  7. MsBerry_98

    MsBerry_98 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ... ****

    tyte and right! needless to say, i likes.

    flow on... flow on...

    (begging for more):cool:
     
  8. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh! This is so nice and romantic. I smiled though it all. :)

    Madd Sistahly Love
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like the way you laid this out bruh!

    Respect
    Reas
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    klabarron

    This is simply splendid! Love the vivid imagery!

    N2
     
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