Black Poetry : Take Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by candeesweet, May 14, 2011.

  1. candeesweet

    candeesweet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :em4700:
    PlZ take me to the sky
    Where all the Blue Lies
    And the Clouds envelope Me
    With different shapes and sounds
    PlZ be the One to catch Me as I fall
    So deeply in Love
    Lost within this Large World
    I want that One right there
    Then when night comes Wish for Me
    To Bcome Your Wife within Your Heart
    I realize Your There
    Cause I see you Every Night
    I’m there inclined to believe
    You wish for Me Too!
     
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    Proverbs31Woman Be kinder than necessary! MEMBER

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    Welcome to the Destee.com family candeesweet!

    What a beautiful poem and I love the subtle intensity of the journey, well done indeed!
     
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    Very Nice flow Sister candeesweet
     
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    welcome within the poetic house
    this was warm fuzz and beautiful

    One will take you above and beyond again welcome candeesweet
     
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    candeesweet,

    Lovely, especially when read aloud.
    The visual staircase is a nice touch.
    This piece also works being read both ways.

    Fun read. nicely done.

    Totalview
     
  6. candeesweet

    candeesweet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am so glad ya'll enjoyed my staircase to love!