Black Poetry : Take Me to Your Eden

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Take me to your Eden
    take me to that place
    where your poetry originates
    those words flowing, full of grace,
    truth, honor, love, lust, depending
    upon your mood
    your prose is the soul's food
    that I have had a hankering for
    for so, so long
    Take me to your paradise
    Don't worry, I'm strong
    enough to withstand the rigors
    of the journey. I'll just hold
    on tight to the orbit of your imagination,
    and fly upward to the gold
    laced galaxy leading to your universe.
    What kind of hidden treasure awaits?
    Will the stars reveal the secret?
    Take me to your pearly gates
    Unlock the portal to heavenly bliss
    Let's complete this love connection
    sent out on a wing and a prayer
    pinpointing a target in our direction
    Lead me to your circle of life
    that inner circle, watch it spin
    360 degrees to completion
    arriving at your center, the core within
    Take me to your Eden
     
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    Ahhh. What a beautiful piece. This line especially captivates me, watzinaname:

    I'll just hold
    on tight to the orbit of your imagination,
    and fly upward to the gold
    laced galaxy leading to your universe.

    You've got me hooked and along for the ride. I think that must be the biggest testament to love that there is - wanting to go to the core of someone's soul.

    Peace.
     
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    Man, I thought I would be first to reply:( Gempis took my words!!!:lol:
    That must be one hell of a ride sista:)

    tight flow!!!!



    :heart:
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am glad those lines captivated you so gempis. This means a lot coming from a poet such as yourself. Thank you.
    SwtT, happy to read a response from you, no matter how quickly you hit the reply button. :) My imagination is working overtime, thank you poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very lovely flow dis was sweet sistah
     
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    nice drop...
     
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    Ahhhh...sister this was smoooove...

    I dug this verse here:

    "Take me to your paradise
    Don't worry, I'm strong
    enough to withstand the rigors
    of the journey. I'll just hold
    on tight to the orbit of your imagination
    ,..."
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for your kind words of support Rich.
    Your support is appreciated blkangel, thanks.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you greggy for diggin my work. You're a wonderful addition to this family.
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A concept so right!

    Diggin' it myself!
     
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