Black Poetry : T.H.U.G

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  1. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    T.H.U.G

    Tattered
    Hero
    Under
    Ground

    Born into a dirty gutter
    Torn and lost little mother******
    Lost in tha mind because he has a drug addicted mother
    He has no father
    Because of another murdered and lost brother
    No one else to look up to because he has no not even one brother or sister

    No wonder he’s now a thug
    a
    Tattered
    Hero
    Under
    Ground

    No one to look up to except those people he see on tha streetz with tha constant money
    Wanting to be just like them to provide for his already torn family
    Hoping and praying that this dirty money will somehow retrieve his mommy
    But what he doesn’t know is it won’t, but he tries anyway.....what a confused little dummy

    It’s gonna happen anyway......he’s a predestined thug
    a
    Tatter
    Hero
    Under
    Ground

    Gunning and stunning
    little playboy bunny
    Wannabe.....cause in his heart he as scared as tha people he robs while gunnin’
    Wantin to stop but can’t because he took that oath to never go runnin’
    Yet he acts hard in front of his peeps like he’s a number one stunner
    Ridin’ shot gun in his black Hummer
    Yet warm and soft in tha inside as if it was summer

    A true
    Tatter
    Hero
    Under
    Ground

    Saved up a mill. in a year
    Used half of it to buy Christmas for the children in his neighborhood that otherwise would have nothing this year
    Five, six presents a person and clothes for everyone to wear
    Yet he wonders where he would be if he wasn’t there

    I don’t know but he would still be
    a
    Tattered
    Hero
    Under
    Ground

    Turning to guns, violence and jails
    Taking a sure fire way to hell
    Fightin’ his own people back to tha gutter in which he came from yet encouraging tha youth to never fail
    Got a story yet he’s afraid to tell

    Yet.....because he’s afraid to tell
    He’s a thug
    a
    Tatter
    Hero
    Under
    Ground

    Committing sin after sin
    Getting high and drinkin gin
    Because he’s tired of losing ALL his friends
    And tire of waitin’ for his OWN life to end

    Cause he realized he’s just a thug
    He’s a
    Tatter
    Hero
    Under
    Ground

    Mother dies of an over dose
    Tears on his heart and face because he wanted to help her the most
    Thinking he has nothin’ to leave for.....he becomes more violent portraying a image that’s false
    Now he’s just lost

    And still
    a
    Tatter
    Hero
    Under
    Ground

    Now that he THINKS he has nothin’ else to live for
    He takes more tyme committing crimes than helpin’ him or her
    Not even recognizing’ his own daughter....tha gang now comes before her
    Now he’s tha same thing he wished never to be.........a no good father

    But still
    a
    Tattered
    Hero
    Under
    Ground

    Until he finally as for his forgiveness
    Got down on one knee before the lord with gracefulness
    Cried with joy and felt peacefulness
    Pray and ask tha lord this :

    “ Lord I know I might be a true thug
    Ridin’ around killin’ and not acceptin’ hugs
    But I tried to help lord....I did
    But one thing I forgot was the holy words you said
    I know I messed up along tha way
    But if right now you could forgive me and let me stay
    I will forever not look at like in my thug way
    But live a life of joy and help tha world thur my talents of gray
    I’m gettin’ tired of crying because I live in a world of black
    Sheltering a adding deaths with my gack
    I never knew this but I now know you will forever have my back
    But lord if you could find it in you heart to take this thug back
    I would really appreciate it
    And do everything I said bit by bit
    AMEN!!!!!!!”

    Now this
    Tatter
    Hero
    Under
    Ground
    has become what he knew he could be from tha start
    A earthly heart
    And a
    Terrific
    Hero with
    Unique
    Gratitude
     
  2. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thoughts of 2pac..... thanks 4 the ride
     
  3. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for feelin' my flow.......carmelpython
     
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    very tight flow :heart:
     
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    You keep the reader wrapped in the story 'til the end...nice.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well well very nice scribe
    felt ya line by line tyteeeeeeeeeeeee!
    speak on
     
  7. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice very nice drop...
    keep flowin :angel1:
     
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    Foxy...your talent is incredible...
    I adored the concept in this...the originality
    of how you described the meaning of a Thug
    and the reformation of a Thug and the new
    meaning...

    Incredible...

    Totally Impressed!
     
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    foxy, your writing reaches way, way beyond your years. this is just amazing, girl. many props to you.
     
  10. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwww.......thanks so much fam.....thanks so very much.....I didn't write this about anyone in particlar but I did write what I believed to be a thug.....especially in my neighborhood....where the nights never end and the days become shorter.....well, that was probably too deep.....what that mean is, thugs come out at night and there they end people's lives thus making days shorter..... Just something I can up with..... but hum....anyway.....thanks for tha replies.

    Much luv,
    foxy...............