Poetry Critiques : Sweet VooDoo Child (2)

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sweet child
    Within the night
    The innocence was broken
    Like a china doll
    As he took her soul
    And all her hopes
    Because of his thirsty
    He wanted a taste of Black beauty
    Attracted to her more then his own
    Molded to perfection
    Full lips bright eyes of diamonds
    Round shape hips...for he feen
    A creature he dare not have but wants
    Voodoo child
    Cry out
    Cry out
    Flooded souls trying to hold it down
    Like chain reaction
    She pulled herself up
    And went on like it never happen
    For she carried the storm
    Voodoo child of mystery
    Without complaint just trying to maintain
    One day we shall all be free
    Of this storm
    Chains will unlock
    And we will be lifted
    Cry out
    Cry out
    On and on
    The world keeps turning
    A chain reaction is coming
    Building and building
    Releasing and holding
    A kingdom of Kings and Queens
    Pride in our walk
    As we stride for a better day
    As our souls begin to talk
    We rise
    We rise
    Drifting on the Black River
    Voodoo child of mystery
    Deep within the soul
    We as a people have the knowledge
    Teaching and learning
    Writing and reading
    Foreseen
    We rise
    We rise
    Remember that
    Black souls of poetry
    Within us we have the
    Meanings of all meaning
    Black voodoo child
    Been in the storm way to long
    Break the chains and
    A sweet chain reaction
    Will coming……
    Sweet voodoo child
    Cry out
    Cry out
    For the storm will fade
    Its already foreseen

    (C) 2004
    Black souls of poetry
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is one of the pieces where we can surely say ...
    "history do repeat itself" ...over and over and over. I found this to be a very interesting write, it really pulled me in.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i like how this mix from the first and
    keep it's pose a very nice write sis.
     
  4. AHMOSE

    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Again as I read this piece I find myself simpathising with the writers pain. This is a nice piece.
     
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