Black Poetry : Sweated Out (verse 1 of 8)

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  1. garlicsalt99

    garlicsalt99 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SWEATED OUT (verse 1 of 8 )

    As I sit here, I’m having flashbacks of the happenings in our room
    Here it is Thursday Morning, but I’m still feeling the effects of Saturday Afternoon
    The soreness in my abdomen jogs my memory and I’m thrown back to a place
    That causes me to feel phantom pleasures and stare out into space
    Memories to be acted out as a cognitive parody
    I can see and feel Saturday Afternoon with acute awareness and crystal clarity
    Actions, that at the time of incidence – purposed pleasures, you delivered it
    With foreplay and intercourse that was meant to be done right and deliberate
    I’m having flashbacks, of the time of incidence and action
    That in its culmination resulted in five days of satisfaction
    My body is still feeling relaxation and elation
    I’m still feeling the results of a multiple ejaculation
    I’m still feeling the effects of what made our bodies sing
    What caused sweat to run from my forehead and make my eyes sting
    Various parts of our interaction in memory stuck out
    And what I do know, when it was all said and done,… I was wore the f*#k out
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thursday Morning...and you still feel it on
    Saturday. Somebody done something right.
    This scribe is FIYAH!! for sure.

    Luv it
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaa!!
    this was some heat next part !
     
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    This was on point.
    U had me hanging on yr every word.
     
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