Black Poetry : SunSHIP

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  1. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A commitment of friendship. Golden days built on sunshine smiles and hope for change leads me searching for confirmation. I see beauty in the seconds we spend together and the hours I long for u. this separation created by my imagination yet fueled by the miles between us, leaving me questioning.

    I yearn for a commitment of friendship. I see humanity in your eyes and hunger in your hopes; I taste loneliness in your kisses. Its something about this... I can't put my finger to it. The world I have created for u, u don't live in. I find myself taking rockets to planets far away... streaming. Only to realize it is only me on the moon searching for growth. And you are flying Saturn's around me.

    Quiet times of silent cries and lost breathes leaves my mind puzzled with agony. Wondering why your actions get to me. But I still come back. Having no choice but to have faith in u, because I trust myself, the self I see in your soul that provokes me. Engulfs me, intrigues me.

    Wondering if the facade I create will disappear as these days do... and my departure comes to. And I find myself... hearing commitment of friendship. Asking for such would be demanding loyalty to a stranger... or my bank information to Uncle Lenny with the habit... and yet I type each word... expecting insanity.

    It's like the conversations ended when the hugs began, and those paused with the music beats from your heart. And ****, who am I to push that **** to the back or the side or the front, who am I to refuse the art, and masturbate to ideals of words being reality's confirmation of balance.

    Turning time backwards to build on what should have been now would only seem troublesome. And yet I seek the solidification of all my confusion. Pondering on how future visits will be labeled and connections defined, I want to seal the moment of interest with friendship. Kiss away the emotions of… it was good then but maybe it's not good now, or I am sorry I over stepped my place only to find me enjoying your touch…and that sorry only meant what??

    And I laugh to myself and such demands I wish to ask. I laugh because as I know the self I see in you... my initial point of thought would be wrapped around why and how... or what…now?. Why would u give such with out allowing you to really give all? I have noticed that the small amounts of sunlight that's shined from your windows are the same ruining your warm dark nights. Locking yourself in such solitude only provokes retreat.And yet I find strength in your push away. Limited strength.

    And how... how can u lend your insides to someone destitute for separation, designed for the same solitary confinement you are, and find peace in the situation. I do. Find peace in u. that is. Or simply in the thought that the person I have wanted to know... I have come to. Whether that is what I wanted it to be, or should I say the whether it is the person I expected to meet, it is how I desired. Wanting intellectual connection through unsaid words, unwritten thoughts, simple hugs and goodbyes. The goodbyes that u are all too fond of hearing. And fail to say at separation.

    And what of it all... why not just let things fade into existence and exist as is... or come as be... and melt with the sunshine coming up, and soften with the moons glaze. Why not just ignore all these mixed words and chopped emotions... and just live as you did before me. Or as u do now... with me... on the edge of question... failing to see or hear things I mention... like those speaking to me as I type this. My heart writes this. And I can't stop expressing this.

    I feel like time cost more than gas now and days … and I find myself selling mine to only wish for yours. Or spending mine waiting on yours. Either or… your presence is lacking these past … beats… and who am I to question this almost there, once was there, will be there.. Kind of man. Feeling that what I have wished to invest doesn't measure to my capabilities, if only I were given some opportunity... which is why I seek a commitment of sun ship.

    Some…unwritten, unspoken, invisible seal of connection that allows these barriers to halt for minutes. To fall for conversations... Crumble for hugs. True, deep, spiritual hugs. From day one I have been pulled away from u by the arms that hug me and any hopes of such optimism has been spoken false by the mind I admire in you... And yet my urge has been to revoke such insanity. And push for faith of knowing the person I am, is the real person I want you to see, not the images and stories, and long nights…that I have created.

    But of course, time changes everything... Including rules and regulations of sun ships. So I just aim for confirmation that you will give the time needed in order to see the sun in me, that I have searched for in you... since day one. Circling back to my point of existence... Friendship. Such confusing Aquarius' characteristics leaves me stuck in the mirror writing this... re-reading each sentence with the pretense... knowing that it will never be sent... And u will not know my inner thoughts.


    Just hellos, hugs, and good byes.
    Just hugs, hello, and good byes.
    Just hello, hi... I am leaving... good bye.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    daroc:
    I was not logged in but veiwing the poetry
    forum as I sometimes do. I read your piece
    twice back to back and could not help but log in
    so I could post to this thread. This is such a
    Phenomenal write. I mean my words here could not
    and will not do this piece justice. Anytime I read
    poetry that makes me feel as if the words were scooped
    from my thoughts or if I feel like the words are
    are speaking to me I am so moved. Kind of like going
    church and the sermon that pastor preaches is exactly
    what you needed to hear. This is something really
    BEAUTIFUL here.

    Much Luv
     
  3. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow

    i know it was long...but..i just want to thank u soo much for ur wonderful comment... it takes time to leave love(which i even fail to do after reading things on here)... but i appreciate your words very much so...this was sumin that really needed to be wrote.. and i cant stop reading it myself...

    a little backdrop to it is ... i met thus guy who is same sign, same interest, same everything.. but his life has broken by numerous deaths and defeat.. but i have found beauty in him. we hit it off.. blah blah...but music is his thing that pulls him off earth..and i will b moving outta state soon.. and lets js say things aint been the same..

    so u always sit and question.. how easier things would be with some sign of cnfirmation ...some sunship...

    thanks!! from the heart!
     
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    Very deep poetess: I felt this peice describing my situation as well. This is definately worth a second read.
     
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    The genuine texture of free flowing thoughts, the poetic artistry of penning "hooks", those lines that you can't quite get out of your head because they capture such exact feelings....this is what came to mind as I read this. When you feel this way about a person, they know, and those feelings are shared to evoke such within you. Whether or not the other person actually acts upon those feelings, well, the ball is in their court. I was quite taken by this write daroc...wow.
    BTW, I tried to give you some rep points on this, but I have to spread it around some more first... ;)
     
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    That's the nycest poetry I've read in a long time that did not rely on rhyming.

    Wow, what skill.

    I am blessed to have read your work, poet.

    One.

    - Ikoro
     
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    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    circles

    obama said life is an intercepting path of lives and incidents.. just wanted to bring this one back around.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome scribing sis indeed this one has me thinking on the wings of flight
     
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    sister 4everluv is my kindred sister lol
    she hit the nail on the head
    this was like an essay style reflection and it just read so smoothly
    hats off sister daroc hats off :great:
     
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    hmmm...

    ...the complexities of friendship...as it migrate from its humble beginnings, mutating into its differing forms...moving from one milestone to the next...always evolving...FOREVER friendship.

    sometimes, we get so caught up in the ever changing spheres of emotional attractions that we begin to rationalize our own changing attractions...justifying their evolution...as we move to a space that isn't the place you're both aiming for...in your desire to MAXIMIZE the friendship of YOU.

    BEAUTIFUL FLOW.
     
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