Black Poetry : Sunset of You

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Seeing us tangled up
    in each other
    with our sunset sky smiling
    down as we're loving one another
    Sometimes it just feels good to
    just hold you tight
    to hold everything I have of you
    that's beyond our sight
    Cherishing those realities that
    only our third eye can see
    How you "get" me, sight unseen
    You know what I mean
    That comprehension that lies
    within pondering muses
    That spiritual connection that
    simply refuses
    to fade
    As we look upward at each
    soothing shade
    of sunset
    seducing us in burnt orange rubies and
    rhythmic roses with a glint of speckled gold
    Blanketing our minds underneath this avatar
    we share secrets yet to unfold
    As we embrace even tighter, two entities
    cascading as one
    We hold each other's destiny
    as we entwine under this setting sun
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love has a way of speaking through you, Watz.

    May the sunset rise again upon your fulfillment.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you 1poet for your oh so kind words.
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very well laid out post. Sista Watz when I think about your work I think about you having what the Tin man didnt not "heart."
    Thanx for sharing.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    warm embracing of the thought of lovin
    u have a way of expressing it .....very well felt
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Godssoulja, thank you for your response, that was very nice to say brotha.
    Thank you brotha Rich for letting me know you were feeling this piece. Appreciated.
     
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    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel like I'm there with...
    you express setting and feeling very well with these words
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for telling me you felt like you were there, I appreciate that arthur1210.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is SO smooth, so tightly written. I'm glad you share your gift with us, sister.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So, so kind of you to say gempis, this humbles me cause I admire your work so well. Thank you.
     
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