Black Poetry : Sunset Masquerade

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Derrick Jay, Jul 18, 2001.

  1. Derrick Jay

    Derrick Jay Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    rising up to that sunset masquerade
    dusk calling to hunger shallow
    walk past love lying still
    and leave its *** right there
    caring not for the promise of tomorrow
    a quick surge of instant will suffice
    three times the bell tolled for repentence
    ignored for hot perspiration
    again a doorknob turns
    last light breaking away inhibition
    fastly loosen the stalker into nightfall
    with the grace of broken glass
    swooping down on wanton prey
    devils passion by convenience
    the meeting place still the same
    watching the clock to slow time
    but darkness is only temporary
    and moans carry a finite tune
    lust scatters to moon's fall
    as the last grunt ensues
    time picks up the pace
    racing for a new beginning
    sunrise...
    first morning alarms groping pride
    running for cover against gods eyes
    got to hide the infidelity
    encased in sheeps clothing
    love is resurrected
    given a forgiving kiss
    a hug of remembrance
    branded first on a deceitful chest
    and once more taken home to his wife...
     
  2. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow!

    DJ...you never disappoint me
    This was a most conscious look at human frailty
    Your images were very vivid
    And I could see the fall of man clearly....

    Wonderful work as always

    *promiscuity*

    :wave:
     
  3. alyce

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    Dee Jay!

    It is indeed a privilege to read your conscious/conscience flow. Another riveting chapter well scribed in the Book of Pitfalls. Keep writing it down. I'm reading!

    Peace,

    a
     
  4. wildflower7

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    now this piece was FIERCE!
    do u hear me? FIERCE!!!
    to the point, clear, loud, and... and
    real!
    -7 :spinstar:
     
  5. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    MY BRUTHA

    U LAID OUT A STRONG VIVED OF FALL GUY
    WOW!! FLOW HEAD ON!
     
  6. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    DJ

    i love poetic art

    and this is that


    <DSS>
     
  7. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sho miss some of these old tymers in scribe
    this was one great piece , oldies but goodies.
     
  8. cursed heart

    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was beautifully written:smooch:
     
  9. skrybble7

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    This was definately a tyte and honest write.
    One love
     
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