Black Poetry : sun gon shine

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  1. thespokesman

    thespokesman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    before u read i ask for real thoughts on the reality of the poem
    please


    Sun gon Shine

    I know its gon shine
    Again

    One
    You call me
    Me I wake up
    A little tipsy
    From the sex
    Best dressed in my mind
    So jazzied up
    She says
    “What are you doing?”
    I say nothing
    And she sighs
    In my mind I’m still hypnotized bout them thighs
    She says baby
    I got something to tell
    Now my mouth closes and skin begins to chap
    What happened?
    I think I may be pregnant………..




    But……I say nothing
    Quite disappointed
    And ****, I’m so disjointed
    I ain’t ready for no kids
    Don’t really want to hear what the deal is
    I can’t picture me holding kids
    Buying diapers
    Buying shoes
    What if we break up?
    Will I get used?

    Anyway
    What do I do?
    She considering abortion
    I ain’t even really feeling that
    If I did, who would I tell?
    Would God forgive me?
    Would I go to hell?
    If did, is it me being selfish
    Would I live swell or life be pain
    Steady thinking bout
    What could a been?
    What if?
    Some nay questions
    But the sun gon shine
    Either way
    Will it?
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I don't know, will the sun shine either way?

    Here's what it sounds like to me:
    You want to put pleasure "IN"
    without the results of pleasure comming "OUT" ...9 months later.
    be very careful of the seed...you drop your seed in, for the reward is a "life-time" thing.
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes...

    the sun still does shine


    you posed some very "real"...

    thoughts and feelings here

    and captured so many other's

    story in your scribe...

    this was real...
     
  4. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed this was deeply felt
    da sun will shine within
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No matter the situation, life goes on anyway, be it the right decision or the wrong one. Some have their opinions about what is right or wrong, but you, being an adult, have to decide that for you, and deal with the consequences of that decision. Peace.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tight drop
    the sun will shine
    anyway this was very well posed
    i enjoyed the read
    thanks for sharing
     
  7. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    One of those situations huh?

    We all come arcoss these type problems in our lifetime and during those times this is where a person must grow up. It's a steppin stone.

    One luv
     
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