Black Poetry : Sun-day

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Sha'iyn, Jan 28, 2008.

  1. Sha'iyn

    Sha'iyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i rose with the sun, inhaled in my lungs
    feeling medium rarely but, barely well done
    well-rested so, i sing and spring my bed sprung
    bath runs.. brush teeth, gums, and under the tongue
    cocoa buttered up with oil of a egyp-shun
    toasted a pastry and i ate it down to the last crumb
    yum, crank up the jeep and no, it's not a Humm
    but, when i hit the gas it hums like vrum, vrum!
    my speakerboxx sounds like questlove's drums
    rum pum pum playing songs back from 2001
    here i come, up the block, it's my lunchbreak at 1
    well respected so, i don't need a vest and a gun
    i gotta run. i'll get up with ya'll later or some'n
    get back to work, got done, now it's time for some fun
    um, i'll call Marie, who i call my Honee Bun
    i ain't sprung but, shawty is the sh-- like dung
    i wear a beetle for protection like an egyp-shun
    back to the song.. i long for real womb-mun
    i'll be the man that's making moves only if she comes
    let's cruise through the waters and take us a plunge
    by the island of Jamaica where my family's from
    i want some like when Eve gave Adam a plum
    you got me numb but, don't try to play me dumb
    i'll put a ring on every finger including your thumb
    let's stay together like Al Greene mutual fun
    let's stack mutual funds and have a beautiful son
    daughter, whatever comes, raise 'em and stay young
    tell me, what did you put up in this dinner you've done
    curry shrimp stir-fry, brown rice, and sorrel punch
    "and baked fish with the dumplins on the side
    i should tip ya, i should tip ya"
    now this is cooking 101, you need a trophy, you won
    girl, you tryna have me stuck just like chewed gum
    but, i don't lose my flavor even when i'm done
    "today was a good day", like ice cube sung
    The night is young as I set with the sun...
    to be con. ​
     
  2. LovesDestiny

    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "Today was a good day"...definitely...It was so tight how you took us through your day from sun up to sun down! I was really feelin this!!!!
     
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    Your rhymes were off the hook, very witty and spirited, and read so butter smooth. I really enjoyed this playful trek through your day. ^5!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tight and smooth to a Sun-day of delights .....ya word play was on hit too
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i enjoyed reading this...you have a beautiful way with words :)
     
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    Shuga, Shuga Shane:
    Your Sun-day was one
    unforgettable day. Everyday
    should be a Sun-day.:)
    Its always a treat for me
    to read your AMAZING pen.


    Much luv
     
  7. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    feeling the love for you wife and son here poet

    u
    and felt this macadocious line right here too.

    peace
     
  8. Sha'iyn

    Sha'iyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    macadocious, huh?

    you be catching my lil' lines, playboy. nobody else be seeing them joints. good looking. this write right here mirrors my other poem that was so gloomy. it's ALL about balance. find a Libra and make friends with them.
     
  9. FattnBeautiful

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    I really liked this. It was very creative and fun.
    I liked the flow and rhythm.
    Great work I enjoyed reading this.
     
  10. PLATINUMILLITY1

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    I really admire this
    Your day was wonderful and I felt that over here
    "Rise with the sun
    Today was a good day
    The night is Young"
    You had words that took me there
    Flow on Poet

    I do not know what else to say:10500: