Black Poetry : Summer Rain

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  1. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She was as beautiful as the summer rain,
    Cooling me with the mist
    Of her showers
    And slowly seducing me
    With the way that her
    Began to show off
    Her curvaceous body
    I was hypnotized by the way she looked
    She was 5’7 about 135lbs and had
    Sexy slanted eyes, hazel at that
    Luscious full lips, the type you just wanna kiss
    Nice tight stomach, flat like a wash board
    Smooth long legs, the kind that make you wonder
    And body that only the heavens
    Could have created

    And as I stood here watching her
    Our eyes connected
    I could smell the estrogen
    That her body was putting off
    And as she came closer
    My hands began to sweat
    And my body began to tremble
    I was nervous and didn’t even know why
    Her walk was as if she
    Was gliding in the air
    And with each step closer
    That she took
    I could feel my heart racing
    Baboom, baboom, baboom
    And my knees knocking

    She stuck her hand out and said
    Hi my name is ______
    And I had to cut her off
    Because if I knew her name
    I would have traveled
    Every ocean, every continent, and country
    Looking for her
    Just that I could tell her that
    She was an angel
    That must have been falling
    From the heavens
    Just to bless us with her presents
    But she looked at me with surprise
    And asked me
    Don’t you want to know my name?

    I replayed and said, NO
    Because if I new your name
    I couldn’t give it justice
    Just the thought of her talking to me
    Made me want her
    See, if she only knew my thoughts
    And the bliss that I
    Was willing to inject in her
    Would have corrupted
    Her angelic vision to me
    I stood there for a minute
    And told her that
    Her slightest touch sent me
    Into a place where time
    Does not exist
    She replayed and said
    I am just a simple person
    With an average way about me
    I am nothing special
    But she was wrong
    See, to me she was
    More then just the average person
    She was grace, she was beauty,
    She was everything
    I ever dreamed off
    Ring, ring
    Ah ****, the alarm clock went off.
     
  2. garlicsalt99

    garlicsalt99 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That [email protected] alarm. Why is it that when the dreams are just getting good, the alarm has to go off :?:

    I like this piece. It was flirtatious,... something to take notes from. Play on playa' :pool:
     
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    Yes, the stuff that dreams are made of. Some dreams can depict a vision like that. Flow on poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u dreamth of what every man lone
    that perfect sweet tender one
    click ! da clock can i return to this
    yearn dream .......awesome flow !!!!!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awe

    awesome flowing enjoyed this read...what a dream.....
     
  6. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Don't you all just hate it when your having a good dream and the alarm clock goes off.
     
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    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Time to get up buddy, it was only a dream....This was a beautiful poem....Thankx...
     
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    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I thought it would make an interesting twist by adding the alarm clock bit.
     
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    Very nice! thanx for sharing.
     
  10. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    no prob thanks for reading
     
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