Black Poetry : suddenly, im cold

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  1. SPIRITNORTH

    SPIRITNORTH Banned MEMBER

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    i feel a chill
    fall down my spine
    as the last thought of you
    evaporates from my mind

    reflections of a day
    when u and i would play
    has spent its finally company
    inside of me

    i felt it gasp for air
    and cling onto my bones
    forcibly holding on
    a place no longer its home

    i've seen better days
    and worse days but you
    have ultimately brought destruction
    and your heart a black hole suction

    i collaspe on the wood floor
    and my face turned pale grey
    shuttering at possiblities
    that kept getting in good sense way

    i was shaking like a fish
    upon dry land
    and watch movies of abuse
    from u play inside my hands

    suddenly im cold
    cause your leaving me
    im releasing you once for good
    finally.
     
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    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    somethings are better
    left to memory and not reality
    nice joint...forreal
    one love
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed allowing the memories to capture it
    sometime more worth then knowing now
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like the chill running down your spine part.. I pictured trouble.. and you escaping the grip of some strange force pretending it was love. WOW what a nice flow..
     
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    VERY VERY NICE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i liked that beginning too..
    that first paragraph took me right on in
    thanks for sharing
     
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