Black Poetry : Substitution...

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  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dreaming about you,
    Does not really help.
    Because when I open my eyes,
    I repeatedly realize,
    That I’m still by myself.

    Now I’m listening to love songs,
    That’s simply breaking me down,
    Them relaying about how true love,
    They think they have found.
    But then I think about you.
    Why are you doing this to me?
    Being absent from my arms constantly.
    Or am I doing this to myself?
    Reminding myself that I’m by myself.

    Now I’m reading past letters,
    That once came in a steady flow.
    You letting me know what’s going on,
    On your side of the world,
    Reminding me that I’m your special girl,
    And that your are wishing that you could be here,
    With me…
    But you’re not so I’m still by myself.

    Now I’m looking at your picture,
    Your beautiful face,
    But me?
    Not present at that time or place.
    Your beautiful smile,
    And all the while,
    Your’re there,
    And I’m here looking at you,
    By myself…

    Now I’m writing this poem,
    These emotions growing by lines,
    Emulating my loneliness,
    Which grew over time,
    The time spent being away from you.
    Question is…
    Are you by yourself too?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what a question it is !!!
    one's so loveth openly by heart
    set off a glowful rainbow in showers
    this was awesomeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To feel and yearn, but not quite know, I felt the deep ache in this, the words speak volumes.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    They could be penning the same poem ...at the same time.
    that was a very nice poem I like the way you flowed it, thanks for sharingit.
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop
    i hear ya on dis
    likes
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...sister
    this really tugged
    at the heartstrings...
    and then that ending
    ...so powerful...

    I really enjoyed the
    way you just let go
    and allowed the emotion
    to flow through this piece...
    very effective...

    I loved it...
     
  7. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the love.....i was definitely drawing from my heart and my collection of emotions. Glad you enjoyed reading about how i felt.



    I can feel you, feeling me poetically...don't stop
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i can hear the sound of your heart breaking....very emotional, nice drop
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aw, that was so deep and sad. i felt your pain sister. Much love sis for this drop.
     
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