Black Poetry : Sublimital

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  1. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Subliminal

    When was the last time
    That a prostitute turned into a whore?
    Was it when her pimp
    Beat her to a pole?
    Was it when her John pulled out a knife
    And started to cut her throat
    Or was it when her daddy
    Started to rape her at the tender age of only FOUR.
    Subliminal messages and fictitious thoughts
    Giving room for idiotic passages
    Is there heaven on earth?
    Or is this just hell?
    Nah, I call it purgatory an eternal jail cell
    No control over your life
    What to do or what’s to come
    God didn’t dictate the path you walk on
    Free your mind
    Cause we are damned
    From the beginning of the day
    that we where conceived
    And now it’s time
    To get down on bent knees
    Cause the all mighty commands you to believe
    and Lucifer wants you to be deceived
    After all the devils biggest trick
    Was telling people he didn’t exist.​


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  2. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    After all the devils biggest trick
    Was telling people he didn’t exist.

    I liek that lien and it really made me think. Tho i dmit your poem was a lil o nthe negative side ( and theres nothing wrogn with that- poetry is expression and im unbiased as i read anything) - it still made me think and i took in everything you wrote. It was well written and very thoughtfull. Full of emotion which always makes for a good poem if there isnt TOO much emotion so it sounds like yer crying...but you did a good job.
     
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    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks, as long as it made you think.
     
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    indeed it put a thinking cap on mind , this open eyes
     
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    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Like I stated earlier if you went away thinking about what I said then I feel I did exactly what I needed to. That was my intend.
     
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    Poetrymama Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Defiantson, this is very nice. Prayer and Faith is the most powerful thing a person can Possess.
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I felt that one Defiantson. Free our mind and believe in the creator is what I got. Because although we can't see the devil, he's planting subliminal messages in our mind to create the hell we're in. Nice write!
     
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    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thats whats up, thanks
     
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    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It seems like people sometimes what to hear the truth and when it is in front of them they run. Kind of like this Piece.
     
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    Sort of like the devil was urging folks to just let our brothers and sisters in New Orleans suffer, cause goodness knows it wasn't God saying it was alright. Food for thought poet.