Black Poetry : stupid

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by phenomenalwoman, Oct 28, 2004.

  1. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    > Stupid
    > I hate to use such a simple word
    > For this complex situation
    > But really, that's what it boils down too
    >
    > They told me don't travel down this same road again
    > Avoid it
    > But the similarities have got me feeling noided
    > I'm not trying to pass judgment
    > Who in the h*ll am I to judge
    > In fact
    > I respected you for doing what you had to do to survive
    > In your situation
    > Somehow you conveniently forgot to mention
    > That once you had me
    > You'd forget where the ***** you came from
    > This road is starting to seem pretty familiar
    > Stupid...
    >
    > > So while you lay your lazy $295 biweekly @ss under the roof I pay for
    > And brag about "your" car
    > Which is news to me
    > Since when has my name,
    > My credit,
    > My car,
    > Been yours
    > We're not married
    > I'm not your wife
    > You already have one
    > Remember
    > I guess stupid is as stupid does
    > I must take my queue from you
    > Stupid
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The only good thing about sitting with "stupid" is...your willingness to get up and leave stupid...where stupid is.
    nice piece, I feel where you're at/and soon to be...was.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word up sometime one can get confuse with what is and what was
    u have the power to move forward from such i hear ya and feel ya
     
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    I liked this drop not for the content but for the understanding it presented. Just for the record if making the wrong choice from time to time makes us stupid then I am a professional at the top of my game. Great drop! flow on!
     
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    Whoa...this wind was strong....
    Girl...you was crackin the whip on this one :whip:
    Wouldn't wanna be him...
    This piece raged with energy
    and emotion...
    whew...I'm just gonna
    quietly go over to the corner and sit down, QQ...j/k

    You dropped this with the hotness...
    Sage
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Stupid can seem like a harsh word, but sometimes, well, we do feel stupid, especially when deep down we know that we know better. Some changes take strength, which you have already found. Strong vibe emerging here poet.
     
  7. MzMelanie2u2

    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Loved It...!

    :smooch: ..."WOAH"...I do agree, that you came off really strong on this piece, which made it even the more appealing...i was really feeling this..."Keep Em Comin"...1 :terrific:
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was very emotional. I felt this fo sho. I don't know if this was real or not but home girl if it is keep your head up, you're not stupid. you were just blinded by love. This was a good poem and I really have to give you your props for it.
     
  9. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Girl this is powerful, and no, I don't think you're stupid at all. Love the strength in this flow, keep rollin. :dance3:
     
  10. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    queentswana, $$RICH$$, Ireadastory,sage, watz, MzMelanie2u2, krazelyricks,
    gempis thank you all for reading and commenting on my piece. i guess i should explain that this is loosely based on the truth though i am starting to see things for what they really are as well as me for who i really am. thanks guys
     
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