Black Poetry : Students of "The Bottom", a Sixth Grade Primer

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Prologue:

    Truth is stranger than fiction,
    and sadly these stories are based on truth
    It's been about 9 years since I've seen
    their faces, but at times, I still think of them.
    They called their neighborhood "the bottom",
    yes, unfortunately the area where they were livin.
    And anyone who had ever seen it
    knew why that name had been given....

    Chapter 1, Tina

    Tina said all her family was slow
    just a part of her reality
    Her grandmom raised her, cause as an infant
    her mother left her in a "puddle of pee".
    This woman also toyed with the idea
    of throwing her baby out the window
    and seeing if she could run outside
    and catch her in time....And so
    in hearing this, I felt this naive soul
    should not have been active sexually,
    not only did she bear one child, but
    by different men, she bore three.
    Tina sometimes told stories of "hos" in
    the bottom, tales that would shock.
    When asked how she knew what they were
    doing, she said they stank up the whole block.
    Her younger sister, Tara began to worry
    when Tina started sneaking out at night.
    16 year old boys, hanging out with 11 year old
    girls, now you know, that wasn't right.
    But, neither was their plight....

    End of Chapter 1....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done sista
     
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    The tragic is this,...it's a very interesting story and so sad, yet at the same time, I'm waiting to hear the rest...as if I can make it right, so sad, what a life.
    We get a wonded heart and go off the deep end, when hearts do and will mend. But when a very young child has been violated beyond repair, there's much need for worry. thanks for sharing this with us.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for the support on this Rich, appreciated.
    Queent, thanks for your response. The sad thing is, I don't know how any of these children turned out, I don't live near them any more. Pretty sad, I know, I pray for the best.
     
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    The sad truths of life!
    So many can tell of
    such!!!
    We can only hope
    that life experience
    make us all stronger!!!

    Sad but truthful write sister!!!!
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    watz..do you know a novel published maybe two months or so ago
    called the Darkest Child...I bought it because the cover of this sister was
    so exquisitely done...anyway part one of "the bottom" so different in style but the content took me right to the book...you should read it its wonderful..but your style your poetic style is fabulous..and like ive said to you before, you planning on writing a novel or play?
     
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    Oh, this is so touching, heartfelt and real. So beautiful the way you laid it down, sister. I'll be lookin for part 2.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We can only hope so Purplemoons, thank you for responding to this sad tale.
    I haven't heard of the book deepy, but perhaps now I'll check it out. Thank you for the info on the book, and also for your praise. One day I hope to write something of that nature, God willing.
    Gempis, I always appreciate your kind words sista poet.
     
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    would you believe there is an area where I live called "the bottom"...
    it's funny how and why certain locations receive their names
    this was exceptionally written, you allowed us to see through
    your eyes and their eyes...and somehow it was very real...
    because we all know someone's story who survived (or didn't
    survive) the bottom...

    Encore Sister...I can't wait for the rest of this!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Happy to know this peaked your interest sage thank you. I suppose there are plenty of areas called "The Bottom" for the same unfortunate reason....smh.
     
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