Black Poetry : Streams of Consciousness

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by N2urSoul, May 26, 2001.

  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Where is the woman who swam on the lake of
    hatred...did she make it out alive only to dry off
    her cast with the towels of damp misery?

    And where is the woman who sang sad songs
    on the sea of love...did she cry herself into a deep
    sleep and drown?

    What about the woman who carefully watched the
    negative attitudes float care/effort/less-ly into the
    ocean filled with envy...did she positively change
    and navigate her way from the bottom up?

    Maybe that person was at one time ME~
    Yes, true indeed
    all of these women combined
    together were once
    living together
    unharmoniously
    inside....me....
    until I filtered
    and drained
    all that was
    unclean
    out of my being
    through
    streams of consciousness
    and now
    I reside
    comfortably
    alongside
    the river of atonement


    (c) 2001 SOULOFASISTA
     
  2. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    N2,

    With my pen put to rest and my mind free to reply I can think about fruitful reponses as opposed to the "boxed" up comments and thoughts. On that note I'll respond to this piece.

    There are times when we must look at the gifts God gives us and utilize them for the purpose he granted them to us. One of his gifts to you is your poetic talent and your ability to convey your voice to pad/screen and make folks "feel it." Please (I know you've considered it), the book...give it thought, no, you've done that. Put thought N2 action. Share your voice with the world.

    one love,blak
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak~

    You should know I always enjoy reading
    your responses...whateva the form
    they arrive in...I'm just glad that your
    eyes have viewed pieces of me
    that you may not have seen
    when we connect ~ so in this
    case, I've heard you and your
    thoughts, you know what I have
    considered...but I'm still unsure ~
    "fear of the unknown" is more
    like it....!!

    thanks for your continued
    encouragement.


    One.
     
  4. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so sad your song...

    As you sat
    …singing
    atop a sand packed boulder
    I cry
    you sang your wonderfully SAD, SAD SONG
    I felt your pain
    Deep down inside

    As the moment
    Passed…
    I searched your eyes
    For remnants of that pain
    What I sought was no longer there
    No sign…
    No hurt…
    No shame.

    It told the story of you life
    …the many reasons you grieve
    but when I look into your eyes
    the pain would graciously leave

    You wore your mask
    So comfortably
    I’d never know you hurt
    Or was it true
    You played the part
    Of pain…
    Because it works

    As you stood
    …got up to go
    a tear ran down your cheek
    you took a timid step or two
    then turned to me
    to speak

    “thanks, so much
    for caring enough”
    you finally began to say
    “for asking of a stranger
    how she was…
    yes, I’m having a very good day

    though…
    I thought, at first
    That I was cursed
    And why it was that way
    Why pain would come and go with others
    But with me
    …it came to stay
    but I was wrong
    it wasn’t that way
    No!
    Pain…
    really didn’t know me
    Unforeseen occurrences happen, yes
    They just happen often with me”

    Then you walked along that beaten path
    Headed on your way
    I asked if I could tag along
    You said, “please, make my day.”

    Never…a more gentler sound I’ve heard
    Than the voice of you…that day
    A sound that came from deep within
    And traveled…a very long way


    Sing softly
    Your sad song
     
  5. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Baller~

    Only YOU....

    I say thank you for
    allowing me to
    sing my sad songs
    ...how gracious
    are the ears that
    listen and
    respond with a
    smiling soul
    that lifts me up
    from the depths
    of hurt
    to show me
    happiness
    that awaits
    for me
    well beyond
    the other
    side of
    the fig tree

    Thank you dear poet
    for reciting your
    spirit and
    blowing a fresh
    breath
    unto me!


    One luv.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep tyte well written scribe sis.
     
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    Negative forces ultimately pull us down further than that which we hate. Here's to that river of atonement.
     
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    you guys are tooooooooooooo Goooooooooooooood, wonderful, Let it flow

    Peace

    Patrice

    i could respond but i like it just the way is is

    can I touch the magic ssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssstttttttttttttttttttttttttt
     
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    this is a wonderful piece love the flow, flow on poet.:spinstar:
     
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    This was very touching N2
    Loving your flow on this poet
    Much Love
     
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