Black Poetry : Straight Confuzion...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LovelyGoldenOne, Jun 8, 2003.

  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is one of my early poems....tell me what u think!



    starin' out the window
    mesmerizin' over you boy
    nothin' else matters
    in this midst of turmoil
    its been such a long time
    since i've heard you speak
    and apparently you love
    is not there to compete
    i remember the first time
    you spoke the three words
    my heart was overwhelmed
    as your lies calmed my nerves
    and somethin' in the back of my mind
    told me it was lies
    but i just kept pressin' on
    stung and hypnotized
    now i'm sittin' home alone
    slouched upon the chair
    wishin' the ringin' sound of the phone
    would come upon my ear
    each and every time it rings
    i pick up and don't hear you
    if you really wanted me
    you wouldn't leave me so **** confused
     
  2. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

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    loved it! gurl its like you got into heart and tossed it right out! you are so intuned to the emotional state. I would swear that I told you the things I once felt!
     
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    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this right herrre was hot! hit a lil to close to home.lol "it could all b so simple...." much love :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte scribe poetess...........ya flava was on hit
     
  5. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi, :wave:

    Beautifully expressed!! I quess ,we all go through this sometime

    in our lives. Great read!!

    ~Sierra~ :toast:
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lovley. that was a great poem. hit close to home over here to..a lil toooooo close :angry: but i still loved your poem! :wave: :heart:
     
  7. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwwwwww thanks so much purple moons :)
    thanks alot sarcasm...i remember these days all too well...
    thank you very much rich:)
     
  8. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwwwwww thanks for the compliments sierra :)
    sorry if it hit close to home swtT.... :( but thanks for the compliment:)
     
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    Beautifully expressed
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks alot :)
     
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