Black Poetry : STOP!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LyricallyJacki, Oct 5, 2005.

  1. LyricallyJacki

    LyricallyJacki Member MEMBER

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    Just a thought of you
    Is all it takes to
    Make my mind go wild
    Make my heart smile,
    But I can't let u know
    Can't let my feelings show,
    Because we are still only friends.
    Oooh, got me shakin' babe,
    Warm inside, got me goin crazy,
    "STOP", I say to myself,
    "Ease up", I repeat over and over again,
    Trying to remember that you're just my friend,
    It all happened so quickly,
    We clicked instantly,
    So where does that leave me?
    Wanting you so bad I could cry,
    But I shield my heart,
    Can't let you in yet,
    Although it feels like you've already broken in.
    "STOP", I say! We are just friends!!!
    Close my eyes, I see your face,
    Think a little deeper,
    I can feel you touchin' me, holdin' me, kissin me, makin me sweat,
    D*MN! I can't forget
    FRIENDS! FRIENDS! FRIENDS!
    So hard for me to be,
    Cause I want you for me,
    And I don't understand why?!?
    Why can't I just play my role,
    Impatient, I guess,
    When we started, didn't think it would be so complex,
    Just wanted to try something new,
    Another chapter in my book,
    But what happened?
    It's like I'm trapped, I'm weak, I can't help it.
    Everytime I try to let go of this feeling,
    I can't do it, what the hell is this?!?!!
    Okay, calm down,
    These are my exact thoughts,
    See how confused I am,
    This is a first for me,
    Usually I'll just be,
    A cool FWB,
    "Friends with benefits",
    But this time,
    The title doesn't fit,
    Losing my mind huh?
    "STOP", I say! Chill out Jay!
    When the time is right,
    It'll come your way,
    But I'm ready now,
    Gotta wait, gotta wait, gotta wait...
     
  2. bigdrizzle

    bigdrizzle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is an excellent display of internal conflict of feeling somebody way more than you know u should...Great Poem!
     
  3. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :look: I like the flow and the way you displayed the inner conflict and options.
     
  4. LyricallyJacki

    LyricallyJacki Member MEMBER

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    thanks guys! :blowkiss:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes friendship can turn into something more, but what to do if the other person doesn't share such intense feelings? I feel what you're saying here, great write.
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great flow. :great: To be told I never knew. Is something you don't want to hear later, too late.

    " Just a thought of you
    But I can't let u know
    Can't let my feelings show,
    So hard for me to be,
    Cause I want you for me, "



    Sensory impulses are deep and true. Feeling good just being near someone. Causes many strange things to occur.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sweet and deeply felt love the flava of this
     
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    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

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    I really have to say that i enjoyed reading this a lot. It is very well written and very decriptive. Keep up the good work.
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHOOOAAAAA!!!!
    This is so descriptive
    and the imagery is so real.
    Good drop.
    Love this.
     
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