Black Poetry : stimulated

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Apr 29, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i drag in mentally whipped
    limp along physically spent
    ..spiritually drained
    stimulated tho
    jump to the wine...
    sip the chardonnay or the cabernet..
    feel the warmth ooze gently down..down
    ...warming me..
    turn on the tv...check which team has made it through
    start moving around the kitchen
    ...wide awake..thinking about the day..
    the day that has kept me tired...tired...
    keeping me up
    whirling...
    keeping me spent, whipped, drained..
    stimulated tho
    the wine is warm...
    the fish is marinating...i slice the tatas
    coat them in rosemary and garlic...
    rinse the greenery, slice the cuke,
    and think..
    would be nice to have a toke...
    alas, the wine will have to do
    by myself...not with you..
    focused
    . clear about this piece i'm working on
    this piece that keeps me whipped spent drained...
    stimulated tho
    when i get it right...you will see..
    and that will make you smile
    and gently rub me down..
    taking all the drainage out..
    and that will make me..
    smile..
    stimulated
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What I liked most about this piece was the smooth, easy flow, it's as if we were observing your every move. I enjoyed this.
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...Sister Deepy...
    I was completely caught
    up in the scenery...
    you set the stage so well
    I could see and feel the
    entire picture...
    this was a great vibe...
    can't wait for the *smile*
    does this mean that there
    will be a sequel... :look:


    this was a 10...fa sho
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoa......dis took me in like fire & desire
    lovin it sistah
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight flow i was all in it from top
    to bottom
    tight
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    ScorpioStylez Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    smooth

    This is a nice flow and it was smoothly poised

    "If It's A Scorpio Then It Has Style"
     
  7. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice flow, very fluent
     
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    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :flame: :flame: :flame: :flame: :flame:

    I LIKE HOW DETAILED THIS WAS
    That definitely added an element
    Of consistency and creativity to it.
    This one went down easy
    Very good poetry!!!!!!!!!!!

    PEACE AND LOVE
    twision
     
  9. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i be thanking yawl...

    i be thanking yawl..
    for taking time..
    to share your thoughts
    warm my mind..
    i be thanking yawl..
    individually,
    but my life is busy...so i got to pass
    on the one on one
    and say it loud
    family, friends , all
    I be thankin yawl
     
  10. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :read: feeling this piece had me trapped felt it deepy very deeply:wink: